Talk:The Two Roses

Latest comment: 9 years ago by Good888 in topic GA Review

Note edit

Lubin produced a "The Two Roses" in 1914 with Ormi Hawley, but instead of a two way disamb - it might need a full disambiguation because a popular vaudeville act "The Two Roses" was making its way around in 1910. I have neither enough information to give either its own page - but this is a note for future readers. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 19:29, 6 February 2015 (UTC)Reply

GA Review edit

This review is transcluded from Talk:The Two Roses/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Good888 (talk · contribs) 15:23, 3 March 2015 (UTC)Reply

Going to take a look at this article soon. good888 (talk) 15:23, 3 March 2015 (UTC)Reply

Lead section

  • "The film focuses on the young Tony Prolo who goes to deliver lunch to his father, Tony Prolo." Might as well rewrite to: "The film focuses on the young Tony Prolo who goes to deliver lunch to his father of the same name."

Plot

  • "The father, Tony Prolo, greets his young son and happily takes his lunch." Rewrite to: "The father, also called Tony Prolo, greets his young son and happily takes his lunch." or something similar.

Production

  • "The film director is unknown, two Thanhouser directors are possible." Rewrite to: "The film director is unknown, but two Thanhouser directors are possible."

That's all I can find. On hold for now. good888 (talk) 10:37, 8 March 2015 (UTC)Reply

@Good888: All set. I also tightened the wording in the plot a bit more. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 06:48, 10 March 2015 (UTC)Reply
Promoting to GA class! good888 (talk) 19:39, 10 March 2015 (UTC)Reply