Talk:The Price of Gold/GA1
Latest comment: 10 years ago by Courcelles in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 03:44, 6 January 2014 (UTC)
I'll take this one. My first thought, before even reading the article, is whether this should be renamed (or at least hatnoted); redirects exist for terms like this one, where someone may be searching for the literal price of gold, to Gold as an investment. Including, actually Price of gold. Just an initial impression before reading the article... Courcelles 03:44, 6 January 2014 (UTC)
- "The episode scored a ratings share of 3.8 out of 9 among adults aged 18 to 49, and it earned a score of 6.8 out of 10 among overall viewers." This isn't how ratings work. You don't get a 3.8 out of 9, it is a 3.8/9; 3.8 percent of the people in that demographic overall watched, and 9 percent of those in the demographic who were watching television at the time watched the episode. Courcelles 03:51, 6 January 2014 (UTC) (The term "share" also is technical here, and only refers to the 9 and 10 parts of those numbers, not the 3.8 and 6.8. Courcelles)
- Hi, thanks for reviewing. I have added a hatnote about your concern (it needs tweaking, but it's at least something for now). Concerning the ratings, you are absolutely correct. I was trying to convert some of those stats into prose for easier readability, but I see that this also changed their meaning. I have changed them back per your comment. Thanks, Ruby 2010/2013 03:22, 8 January 2014 (UTC)
- Sorry to say, I've been feeling under the weather a bit lately, so sorry for the delay.
- The plot summary is nearly 800 words -- I don't put much stock in Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Television's suggestion of 200-500; 200 would be WAY too few here... but I do think the plot summary could be tightened a little.
- "In August 2011, Zap2It confirmed that the twenty-five-year-old actress Jessy Schram would be appearing in the new series as Cinderella." I'd likely take out Schram's age, or at least put it as "then 25-year-old". Also, MOS:NUM, as an age, this should be 25, not twenty-five.
- Still got a niggle with "The episode scored a ratings share of 3.8/9", the share is only the 9; the 3.8 part of that is the rating, not the share. &You need to directly cite the statistics, not a sentence later.
- "She expressed especial appreciation for the "charismatic and captivating" Robert Carlyle" I'd fix the typo myself, but I'm not sure the modifier special is justified, anyway. Courcelles 22:41, 10 January 2014 (UTC)
Done (removed "especial") Ruby 2010/2013 03:42, 11 January 2014 (UTC)
- What is the "curse"? Non-fans of this series are rather clueless.
- The curse is explained already in the lead. I'm afraid that adding anything more to the reception section would just end up bloating it. Thoughts? Ruby 2010/2013 03:42, 11 January 2014 (UTC)
- "Sava compared "The Price of Gold" to the previous episode, believing the former to be superior" "The former" here is rather ambiguous. Former in this sentence, or former in airdate... rephrase?
- For the awards, was Cinderella's Courtyard only relevant to this episode? The source doesn't say the nomination was for this one ep.
- Yes, but this is the only first season episode that actually shows the courtyard. Is this too much OR? Ruby 2010/2013 03:42, 11 January 2014 (UTC)
- Sadly, i think it is OR here. (though certainly relevant in the season article) Courcelles 03:35, 12 January 2014 (UTC)
- Has the episode been on any DVD releases?
- Yes, it has, but I can't find a reliable source that explicitly says this episode was included on it. I could cite Amazon, which says it includes the "complete first season." Ruby 2010/2013 03:42, 11 January 2014 (UTC)
- Okay, I think that's all I have. Courcelles 22:41, 10 January 2014 (UTC)
- ALos, there would seem to be several reeasonable choices for images out there, of the people involved, esp. of the actors mentioned significantly in the critics commentary. (Morrison, etc.) Courcelles 00:46, 11 January 2014 (UTC)
- Thanks very much for reviewing! I have responded to all of your comments, and have added another picture to the article. Please let me know if there's anything else. Ruby 2010/2013 03:42, 11 January 2014 (UTC)
- One more thought would be File:Onceuponpriceofgold.jpg. FFD tends to be going against screenshots as infobox contents under NFCC 8 lately. See File:Stolen Earth.jpg for an example of one that got through FFD with difficulty, and note how much stronger the rationale of use is than it is here. Courcelles 03:35, 12 January 2014 (UTC)
- I've now removed it the image and the awards section. Thanks, Ruby 2010/2013 03:40, 12 January 2014 (UTC)
- Great work, we're done here. Courcelles 04:46, 12 January 2014 (UTC)