Talk:The Onyx Hotel Tour/GA1

Latest comment: 14 years ago by Xwomanizerx in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: ipodnano05 * leave@message 06:43, 10 January 2010 (UTC)Reply

Quick fail criteria

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  •  Y on links validity check per [1]
  •  Y on disambiguation and other dubious wikilinks per [2]

-- ipodnano05 * leave@message 21:05, 11 January 2010 (UTC)Reply

GA review

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GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS):  
    Comments coming in soon. -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 21:17, 11 January 2010 (UTC)Reply
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
    Reference # 27 does not seem reliable. What makes www.orlandofloridaguide.com reliable? -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 21:21, 11 January 2010 (UTC)Reply
    I tried looking for a more reliable source, because it is an official press release from Spears, but i couldn't find any other. I don't think the information should be deleted. --Xwomanizer (talk) 03:36 15 January 2010 (UTC)
    If it's a press release than it is acceptable for GA. -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 02:52, 16 January 2010 (UTC)Reply
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
    Image on the "Development", "Critical response", and "Cancellation and lawsuit" sections need alt text while the image on the "Broadcast and recordings" section should be entirely removed as it fails WP:NFCC #1 and #8. The image that has Britney kissing another woman, please specify which one she is with brackets since they are both blond it's kind of hard to tell. -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 21:05, 11 January 2010 (UTC)Reply
    She is actually kissing a man; i added that in the description on the article too and added all the alt text, so   Done. --Xwomanizer (talk) 03:36 15 January 2010 (UTC)
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Prose comments

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Lead   Done
Background   Done
  • Add venues and states of cities for each concert date.
  • "Spears said in a statement," --> "Spears released a statement saying,"
  • Refrain from using "the tour" so much.
Development   Done
  • Add name of her previous tour.
  • Remove one period after The O.C.
  • "VP of music marketing" --> "Vice president of music marketing"
Concert synopsis   Done
  • "A video interlude followed featuring Spears and her friends leaving a club, but she noticed a woman dressed in 1930's fashion." This sentence makes no sense.
Reception   Done
  • Stay consistent, pick "Person of Magazine" or "Magazine's Person".
  • There is a lot of "Person of Magazine said". Make some like "Person of Magazine believed that Spears...".
Moline injury   Done
  • Link the city, add state, and venues of concerts.
Cancellation and lawsuit   Done
  • Again add state.
Broadcast and recordings   Done
  • Unite into one paragraph

Once all of the issues above are addressed then the article will be promoted. -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 17:07, 16 January 2010 (UTC)Reply

Beside the two concerns in the lead section, i corrected everything else. Xwomanizerx (talk) 18:42, 16 January 2010 (UTC)Reply
Now it's finished. Xwomanizerx (talk) 14:31, 17 January 2010 (UTC)Reply
Great, the article is definitely GA now!! Congrats!! -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 02:27, 19 January 2010 (UTC)Reply
Thank you! Xwomanizerx (talk) 03:37, 19 January 2010 (UTC)Reply