Talk:The Hall of Egress/GA1

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Courcelles in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 19:03, 23 April 2018 (UTC)Reply


  • "The episode was written and storyboarded by Tom Herpich, from head writer Kent Osborne, Jack Pendarvis, Ashly Burch, and Herpich." from what? It feels like a word is missing here.
  • "Finn and Jake set out to found a dungeon" Found? As in to start a dungeon?
  • That was a typo; I fixed it and rewrote the following sentence to make it all flow better.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:40, 23 April 2018 (UTC)Reply
  • Ref 8 appears not to be an RS. Got another source for this "business practice"? (NB:In reality PT Barnum never did half the stuff he's alleged to have done, making me wonder if this too is apocryphal.
  • What won the Emmy that year?
  • "The episode, which debuted on March 5, 2016 on Cartoon Network." is a sentence fragment. Courcelles (talk) 19:43, 23 April 2018 (UTC)Reply

That's all I've got. Courcelles (talk) 19:09, 23 April 2018 (UTC)Reply

@Courcelles: How does these changes look?--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:44, 23 April 2018 (UTC)Reply