Talk:The Family Jewels (Marina and the Diamonds album)/GA1
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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 12:31, 6 July 2016 (UTC)
Hi there! I'm Cartoon network freak and my review for your GAN is going to arrive within this week. Overall, after my first reading of the article, it looks good! Best and until then, Cartoon network freak (talk) 12:31, 6 July 2016 (UTC)
Lead edit
studio album by → studio album recorded by- collaborated with producers → collaborated with several producers
- certified gold → certified Gold
and has sold → and has since sold
- Then leave it this way; it's OK also. Cartoon network freak (talk) 19:32, 8 July 2016 (UTC)
Infobox edit
The cover needs an alt text
Background edit
institutions, and → institutions and- began to compose → began composing
- playing a variety → playing at a variety
- place in the → place on the
- of three → of the three
said that the title → which title? Do you mean her name?Done
Composition edit
because I'm → because [she is]- track "Are You Satisfied?" ponders → add comma before and after the song's name
- of the Danish → of Danish
- "Girls" that → "
- Girls", which
- "Girls they never befriend me/'Cause I fall asleep when they speak/Of all the calories they eat" → Add ' instead of " + you need to finish the quote
- celebrity → plural
and some reviews did not include it. → causing some record reviews not including it.
I've reworked this section slightly. I meant "celebrity" as a conceptual noun, like "fame", but I've changed it to "celebrity culture" so that there will be no more misunderstanding. '''tAD''' (talk) 19:50, 8 July 2016 (UTC)
Music videos edit
- "I Am Not a Robot", featuring much body glitter. → "I Am Not a Robot", which made use of several body glitter.
- Try to use other words for "video", not the same
- Her father's opinion is pretty unrelevant in this context
- Facebook is unreliable; I'm sure you can find another source for it:)
Done
Singles edit
- first single → first single from The Family Jewels
- and "Mowgli's Road" was released on 13 November 2009 → with "Mowgli's Road" being premiered on 13 November 2009.
- 1 February 2010,[1] and reached → Make two sentences out of it
- The 26 April is two times there +
- Try to use another word for "reached"
- single, losing → single, eventually losing
Tour edit
- stating "Next → stating that "next
Critical reception edit
- and Luke → while Luke
- only in the titles → remove "the titles"
- Gill considered → Gill who considered
- You use two times "considered"
- and lyrically found → while lyrically founding
- match what → match with what
- In the review box, the "fairly" is written two times capital and one time not
Done
Commercial performance edit
- certified Gold → certified Gold
- and had sold → having sold
- certified Gold → as above
- The record reached → It reached
- Charts, and entered → remove comma
- It peaked → The record peaked
- 138;[59] furthermore → form two sentences here
Track listing edit
- You should hide the EPs as well like the other editions
Charts edit
- Fine
Certifications edit
- Remove "Certified units" and "(with citation)"
- This is how the template appears, see Template:Certification Table Bottom '''tAD''' (talk) 17:20, 9 July 2016 (UTC)
Release history edit
- Unlink formats and labels
Outcome: On hold On-hold for 7 days. Besides some words repetitions and few grammar issues, this article is well-written, and you could consider nominating it for FA-status like Electra Heart. Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 16:55, 9 July 2016 (UTC)
All Done