Talk:The Dying Swan/GA1

GA Review

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Undertaking review

I will undertake a review here. The article appears stable, neutral and well written. There is a deletion proposal in place for one of the two images in use in the article, and this needs to be resolved.

• I've removed the questioned image until the discussion is resolved. Kathyrncelestewright (talk) 15:13, 14 August 2009 (UTC)

Other points:

• The entire following passage lacks a reference: "Anna Pavlova (who had just become a ballerina at the Maryinsky Theatre) asked Michel Fokine, who had also read the poem, to create a solo ballet for her for a 1905 concert being given by artists from the chorus of the Imperial Mariinsky Opera. Fokine suggested Saint-Saëns's cello solo, Le Cygne (which Fokine had been playing at home on a mandolin to a friend's piano accompaniment) as the work's musical basis and Pavlova agreed. A rehearsal was arranged and the short dance completed very quickly."
  • Done. I've cited the source for this passage. Kathyrncelestewright (talk) 15:26, 14 August 2009 (UTC)
• "Pavlova made the dance popular via her many tours around the world over a twenty year period and asked to be buried in the swan costume." Is there a reference for this?
  • I don't recall the source for the statement but have revised it with appropriate references. Kathyrncelestewright (talk) 15:56, 14 August 2009 (UTC)
• In the Makarova quote, the term "bourées" is used. This would not be familiar to a lay reader. Can it be given a brief explanation in square brackets within the quote?
  • I've found a definition from the Merrian-Webster Online Dictionary for pas de bourree. Kathyrncelestewright (talk) 15:13, 14 August 2009 (UTC)
• The internet site citations are incomplete - publishers and retrieval dates are needed as a minimum.
  • I've upgraded these citations and hope they meet with approval! Kathyrncelestewright (talk) 15:13, 14 August 2009 (UTC)

This short article is otherwise sound. I will drop in and see how it is progressing. hamiltonstone (talk) 06:01, 14 August 2009 (UTC)