Talk:The Calusari/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: TBrandley (talk · contribs) 16:44, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

Infobox

• To match with other articles, link "2" in the infobox for season, then remove the episode lists at the very bottom of the infobox

  Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

Lede

• "(stylized as "The Căluşari") is not mentioned/or expanded upon in the article ("Production"). Nor referenced

  Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

• Make a note that it was US airing by saying it is an "American science fiction" or, after Fox network say United States "Fox network in the United States."

  Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

• Only link Fox, not network

  Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

• Episode can't really "premiered" how about "originally aired"

  Done (although, premiered is a verb...).--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

• Link science fiction to science fiction on television. I think.

  Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

• "It premiered on the Fox network on April 14, 1995. It was written by Sara B. Charno and directed by Michael Vejar. The episode is a "Monster-of-the-Week" story, unconnected to the series' wider mythology, or fictional history." wack of run-on perhaps re-word to: , which originally aired on the Fox network on April 14, 1995. Written by Sara B. Charno, the episode is a "Monster-of-the-Week" story, unconnected to the series' wider mythology, or fictional history. Directed by Michael Vejar, [etc.].

  I fail to see how my original sentence is a run-on (a run-on means one long, poorly written sentence). Since mine is several, and you're suggesting a cosmetic re-write, I don't feel that it is necessary.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

• Link Nielsen household rating

  Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

• "The Calusari" received mixed reviews from television critics, with inconsistencies in the plot being cited as the main detractors." Re-write to: "The Calusari" received mixed reviews, with critics citing inconsistencies in the plot as the main detractors."

  Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

Plot

• Mulder’s is curly aposthrate. It should be regular ('), as per MOS:PUNCT.

  Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

• "As police" → "As the police"

  Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

• grandmother’s is curly aposthrate. It should be regular ('), as per MOS:PUNCT.

  Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

Production

• Add comma after Charno

  Commas should be used, in this case, two separate two sentences. Since these aren't two complete sentences, this shouldn't be there.

Broadcast and reception

• Episode can "premiered" how about "originally aired"

  Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

• Only Fox should be linked

  Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

• "The Calusari" received mixed reviews from television critics, with inconsistencies in the plot being cited as the main detractors." Re-write to: "The Calusari" received mixed reviews, with critics citing inconsistencies in the plot as the main detractors."

  Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

References

• Ref. 2: Link to "Fox Broadcasting Company", not "corporation"

  Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

• Ref. 6: "The X Files - The Calusari rated 18 by the BBFC" after The X-Files should be an en-dash, rather than a regular –, it should be – per WP:DASH

  Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

• Ref. 7 is not needed. It is just a search for Ref. 6

  It's actually to show that its the highest-rated of the series. Ref 6 does not show this data.

• Ref. 8: Doubled periods with Time, Inc., which should be Time, Inc

  Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

External links

• "The X-Files Wiki, an external wiki". Repetitive. How about: "The X-Files, an external wiki"

  Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

Great work! TBrandley 17:07, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

All have been addressed or my reasoning put down. Thank you!--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)

No problem. I'll pass. Congrats! TBrandley 19:21, 30 July 2012 (UTC)