Talk:The Boys from Baghdad High/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: S Masters (talk) 08:17, 17 April 2010 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

   The synopsis section is too long.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   All references appear to be in order.

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

   Article appears to be stable.

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   Image complies with fair use requirements.

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Comments: My main concern is that the synopsis is too long, with 1,180 words. It should only be between 400 and 700 words, see WP:FILMPLOT. In addition, it might be good to have a new section called "Awards", and remove those parts from the "Reception" section. Otherwise, the other criteria for GA have all been met. I will allow up to seven days for this to be improved, before making any further decision.

Thanks for the review. I will work on the awards section now, but I'm still having trouble finding sentences from the synopsis that can be removed without losing any coherence. I know it has to be done, I just don't know how. If you have any suggestions I'd be happy to listen. Best, Matthewedwards :  Chat  22:44, 17 April 2010 (UTC)

The key is to provide a summary. There are a lot of details provided. Try to summarize those points without going into too much detail. You may want to try to ask someone at the Guild of Copy Editors for assistance. -- S Masters (talk) 03:46, 18 April 2010 (UTC)

User:AnmaFinotera has hacked about 2000 bytes from the synopsis. Please let me know if you require more removing. It looks a lot clearer now so I may be able to take a bit more out, but I won't be online again until Saturday. Best, Matthewedwards :  Chat  04:56, 21 April 2010 (UTC)

Final comments: Thank you for all the work done to make this a better article. I am now satisfied that it meets all the criteria for a Good Article, and I am pleased to list it as such. -- S Masters (talk) 07:55, 21 April 2010 (UTC)