Talk:The Album (Jonas Brothers album)/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Artmanha (talk · contribs) 05:55, 5 January 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Tbhotch (talk · contribs) 19:29, 17 June 2024 (UTC)

Upcoming review.

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality (prose is clear and concise, without exceeding quotations, or spelling and grammar errors):

   B. MoS compliance (including, but not limited to: lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists):

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources (including an appropriate reference section):

   B. Citation of available and reliable sources where necessary (including direct quotations):

   C. No original research:

   D. No copyright violations:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   edit wars, multiple edits not related to the GAN process, etc. (this excludes blatant vandalism):

6. Does it contain images (or other media) to illustrate (or support) the topic?

   A. Images (and other media) are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images (and other media) are provided where possible and are relevant, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

@Artmanha: sorry for the delay. I'll review this article as soon as I complete Blackpink's. (CC) Tbhotch^™ 04:23, 26 June 2024 (UTC)

Infobox

• No Alt text found

Lead

Y

Background

• "that the details are "going to be announced in the next couple weeks"," → tense
• "the album includes of elements of 1970s pop" → typo
• "while they also revealed the titles" → "while also revealing the titles"
• "brothers went on the Hollywood Walk of Fame, in which they" → where
• "pushed back exactly by a week" → "exactly a week"

Writing and recording

• "with the producer helping the band to achieve their vision" → "helping the band achieve"
• "The first song they recorded was "Montana Sky",..." And that's it? The album has 14 songs. Is 'Montana Sky' the only song critics or the brothers have spoken about?
• "the band opted for a funk-inspired pop album, with references from late 1970s pop grooves" → "the band opted for a funk-inspired pop album, with references from late 1970s pop grooves" → "the band opted for a funk-inspired pop album with references to the late 1970s pop grooves"
• "The Doobie Brothers and The Bee Gees" → "the Doobie Brothers and the Bee Gees"

Release

• A section named Release that doesn't mention the release itself, because it was mentioned in the background.
• "Broadway residency at the Marquis Theatre, from March 14" → wrong comma
• "The Album), while" → wrong comma
• "as well as some hit songs of the brothers' side" → from
• "To support the album, as well their previous four albums the band" → "To support the album, as well as their previous four albums, the band"
• "and is set to conclude on June 20, 2024" → tense
• "consisting on a total" → of a total
• "directed by Anthony Mandler, released April 28, 2023" → released on

@Artmanha: I'm going to pause here and I'll continue later. I need clarification on why "Writing and recording" looks incomplete. (CC) Tbhotch^™ 05:05, 28 June 2024 (UTC)

Thanks for starting the review. As per your comments, I proceeded to include the alt text for album cover and fixed the grammar/spelling as pointed by you. As per why the writing and recording feels incomplete, it was honestly hard to find reliable sources regarding in-depth analysis of this album. However, I think I can include more content to this section and shall start my research today. –

Artmanha (talk) 18:55, 29 June 2024 (UTC)

Regarding the Release section not mentioning the actual album release. What do you think if I were to relocate the sentences from the Background section "all three brothers went on the Hollywood Walk of Fame, where they announced that the album would be titled The Album and was set to be released on May 5. On February 22, the brothers announced that the album had been pushed back exactly a week to May 12 in order to release it alongside its vinyl version." and include on the Release section. Do you think it would make more sense? What do you suggest? Thanks again. — Artmanha (talk) 19:00, 29 June 2024 (UTC)

I'd suggest "Background and release" and "Promotion". (CC) Tbhotch^™ 03:23, 30 June 2024 (UTC)

Done! I believe I've addressed and corrected every single one of your considerations thus far. I'll be waiting for further instructions on your review. Thanks again. — Artmanha (talk) 03:40, 30 June 2024 (UTC)