Talk:Thanatos Painter

Hi Kate! The plural of lekythos is lekythoi. Jpaga (talk) 16:04, 2 November 2017 (UTC) (Prof. Paga)

Gabriella Edghill's peer review

In your fourth sentence of the first paragraph, I would say "including the god of death" instead of "and even". In the last sentence of the first paragraph, "Thanatos painters were given their name..."

Check grammar in first sentence of first paragraph in Lekythi section: "lekythi of a *woman*" rather than "women" Cite the statement made about the greeks believing in the spirits lingering over their grave after they die.

Check grammar in last paragraph. Last sentence, use "image" instead of "imagine"

Do you have any more examples of lekythi paintings done by the thanatos painter? You could also add more to the meanings of the paintings, more analysis.

Good images and great examples!

--Gaedghill (talk) 21:55, 5 November 2017 (UTC) Gabriella Edghill

Sunni's Comment

Hi Kate, I think you have a nice start to your article. Maybe split up the two examples of lekythoi by the Thanatos Painter and go more in depth with their artistic details in order to make your article look more full. Definitely try to add more about death and the lekythois connection to death into your article. Also see if there are any literary sources about the Thanatos Painter or Lekythoi in general to talk about how they would have been used in context with funerary rites and graves. Overall, great job so far, keep on working! Sunniobrien (talk) 21:01, 14 November 2017 (UTC)Sunni O'Brien

(More) Comments from Prof. Paga

Hi Kate - your article is coming along nicely! In addition to the good comments from your peer-reviewer and TF, here are a few suggestions of my own.

• Give your article a clear, precise title.
  
• Divide the article into sections. As Sunni suggested, each vase you discuss could be its own section. You might also add another section about precisely how the lekythoi were used in the funerary rituals.
  
• Better proofreading is needed throughout. Lekythos is singular, lekythoi is plural.
  
• The first sentence in the vase examples section is ungrammatical and vague. Rather than "There is a lekythos...", try writing "One example of a white-ground lekythos by the Thanatos Painter is a vase in the ... Museum." This gives your article greater specificity.
  
• How do we know the youth on the vase is the deceased? This needs a citation and more explication.
  

Jpaga (talk) 16:32, 28 November 2017 (UTC)