Talk:Tesla, Inc./GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lizzy150 (talk · contribs) 12:31, 6 April 2020 (UTC)

Hi, I'm failing this article for the following (major) reasons..

• As per cleanup banner at the top - article has too many references to self-published sources (Tesla's website). For example, references 8 to 21, and 157 to 167 are all linking to Tesla.com. Therefore, the content in the article needs to be evaluated/rewritten to reduce dependency on their company website(s).
• There are cleanup tags littered over the article such as [citation needed] and [better source needed].
• Contents structure is inappropriate and too long - 19 sections is excessive (for comparison, although not good articles, even Ford Motor Company and Toyota are not that long).
• Lead section does not follow Manual of Style (MOS: Lead section). Needs to be 3 or 4 concise paragraphs.
• Sales section - this is too high up in the article
• Board of directors - this is too far down in the article
• Too many one sentence paragraphs or overly-short sections
• Some paragraphs sound like advertising or marketing material (eg. "Tesla's philosophy is not to make a profit on service. Tesla offers service at company-owned service centers. Mobile technicians can also perform most inspections and repairs")
• Article needs copy-editing for grammar, style and tone to be more encyclopedic
• Philanthropy section just consists of three bullet points with no background or context
• Lawsuits and controversies section - this is not easy to understand for general readers. In fact, large pieces of text have been copy-and-pasted from [1], a report by the Securities and Exchange Commission. This is a copyright violation.

See also: Wikipedia:Copyright violations and Wikipedia:What Wikipedia is not

I'm sorry but this article does not meet GA criteria yet, therefore, I'm failing it for now. Thanks, Just Lizzy^(talk) 12:31, 6 April 2020 (UTC)