Talk:Teratoscincus roborowskii/GA1

Latest comment: 6 months ago by Esculenta in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Esculenta (talk · contribs) 17:56, 6 November 2023 (UTC)Reply

Hi, I'll review this article. Should some comments up within a couple of days. Esculenta (talk) 17:56, 6 November 2023 (UTC)Reply

  • Ok, had a read, it sounds pretty good. Here some minor nitpicks below; I'll be back later with more after I check some sources. Esculenta (talk) 17:40, 9 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
    Fixed the nitpicks below, apart from linking Vladimir's name since it shows up redlinked. Olmagon (talk) 21:44, 9 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • is this the guy – Vsevolod Ivanovich Roborovsky? Esculenta (talk) 01:34, 16 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
    I'm not entirely certain to be honest. I mean the name is similar, the country of origin is the same and the years of birth and death also match, but "Vsevolod" and "Vladimir" are pretty different names after all. Given how much the rest of it lines up, I suspect this is the guy but I just can't find the confirmation anywhere that this person ever went by different names. Olmagon (talk) 01:33, 17 November 2023 (UTC)Reply

Lead

  • neither of the two common names is mentioned again in the article; anything in the lead also needs to be in the main text of the article, sourced.
  • link shrubland, seed dispersal, predation, burrow
  • might want to reword the lingering GPT-residue, i.e. "particularly notable", "strengthening the idea"

Taxonomy

  • link first described, Vladimir Ivanovich Roborovski, molecular, morphological
  • "was originally reported to be collected from" -> "was originally reported to be have been collected from"

Distribution and habitat

  • avoid starting paragraphs (and sentences) with an abbreviation
  • link endemic
  • "Dead wood has been noted as" -> "Dead wood is"

Behaviour and ecology

  • looks like article spelling is in Am. Eng., so this should be "Behavior"
  • "upper surface which are lost with age", "It is a ground-dwelling species which forages" which->that
  • link defensive behavior and escape behavior
  • "turning a full circle whilst holding a flashlight" since this is Am. Eng. (I think), "while" would be preferred to "whilst"

Additional comments:

  • Not strictly necessary, but I suggest adding "trans-titles" to the German "Further reading" titles would be helpful
  • all images are appropriately licensed and have helpful captions
  • checked some sources and source-text integrity is fine, no too-close paraphrasing, etc.; all sources are scholarly.
  • Everything else seems to meet the GA criteria, so I'll put this review on hold and give the nominator a chance to finish up the remaining minor items. Esculenta (talk) 01:34, 16 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
    Translated titles now added to Further Reading Olmagon (talk) 20:29, 17 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
    Hi @Olmagon:, if you could finish up that last point (citing and mentioning the common names in the article), then I think we could wrap up this review. Esculenta (talk) 01:40, 22 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
    Added it to the bottom of the Taxonomy section. Olmagon (talk) 14:57, 22 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
    Article promoted! Esculenta (talk) 15:20, 22 November 2023 (UTC)Reply