Talk:Television Romance

GA Review

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 05:01, 26 October 2021 (UTC)

I'll look at this tomorrow when I am more awake! — GhostRiver 05:01, 26 October 2021 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lede

• Mention the actual release date in the first sentence, not just the year
• Commas rather than em dashes in the first paragraph
• "which was written by"
• First sentence of the second paragraph is incongruent with the body; the double A-side release was in November
• "whereas" → "while" (whereas implies a differing opinion)
• "#83" → "number 83"
• "#2" → "number 2"

• These are all done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:23, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Composition and production

• mention that Doran and Baron-Gracie are from the band Pale Waves
• Ambient Light should be italicized
• "ironically, some listeners assume the song is a love song" → "some listeners incorrectly assume that "Television Romance" is a love song"
• Link Matthtew Healy up here in the second paragraph
• "after his manager, Jamie Oborne (who also managed Pale Waves), played Healy" → "after Jamie Oborne, who managed both the 1975 and Pale Waves, played him"
• Remove the parentheticals in the third paragraph and just make that a new sentence
• Some MOS:LQ issues throughout; punctuation like commas and periods should always be on the outside unless you're quoting a complete sentence

• Minus the MOS:LQ issues, these are all done as well.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:23, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Music video

• Should ideally be after the "Release" section since the video came out later
• Delink Matty Healy, should be linked above
• "co-directed by Matty Healy (making this his directorial debut) and Samuel Burgess-Johnson" → "co-directed by Samuel Burgess-Johnson and Matty Healy, with the latter making his directorial debut."
• ""She had no clue what was going on but she was loving it,"" → ""She had no clue what was going on but she was loving it"," per MOS:LQ
• The YouTube views seem somewhat trivial unless it broke a record
• "nominated for an NME Award for Best Video at the NME Awards 2018" → "nominated for Best Video at the 2018 NME Awards"
• Comma after "on 14 February"
• Alternative Press also reviewed the video here

• These should be done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:34, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Release

• A better source than Amazon should be used for the release date; try this from DIY

• Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:24, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Reception

• Upon its release
• "critics" → "music critics", and link to Music journalism
• Comma after "writing for NME"
• ""a shimmering, summer-tinged indie banger."" → ""a shimmering, summer-tinged indie banger"." per MOS:LQ
• ""the song's heavenly chorus,"" → ""the song's heavenly chorus"," per MOS:LQ
• ""allows the Manchester quartet to elevate into a league of their own."" → ""allows the Manchester quartet to elevate into a league of their own"." per MOS:LQ
• No comma after "Clash writer Robin Murray"
• ""a sugar-sweet ear-worm of a track."" → ""a sugar-sweet ear-worm of a track"." per MOS:LQ
• What makes The VPME a reliable source?
• More MOS:LQ stuff all through this section
• "for sounding very similar to" → "for its similarities to"
• "Some critics" are mentioned, but then only one is referenced

• Minus the MOS:LQ issues, these are all done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:35, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Addendum

• The year-end lists and awards and nominations should be in prose, since the former only has three and the latter has one. See something like "Uncomfortable"
• Additionally, there should be a section called "Commercial performance" that talks about chart history; this is in addition to, not instead of, the charts below

• Done. And since there wasn't a lot to talk about with regard to the single charting, I just added a blurb to the "Release" section.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:39, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Track listing

• Incomplete - no credits given in the parameters, no citations, and no total runtime

• How is it now?--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:34, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Charts

• Table should have a title/caption per MOS:TABLECAPTION

• Added.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:24, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Release history

• Table should have a title/caption per MOS:TABLECAPTION
• There should be citations for both of these releases
• "DL" should link to music download, and LP to gramophone record

  Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:28, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

References

• Gig Goer should be the work parameter, not publisher
• Other issues with reliability of sources outlined above

  Fixed.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:28, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

General comments

• Images are either Creative Commons or are fair use, and all are relevant
• No stability concerns in the revision history
• Earwig score looks good
• Article is missing a Personnel section with music and production credits

• Added personnel section.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:30, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Putting on hold to allow nominator to address comments. Feel free to ping me with questions, and let me know when you're finished. — GhostRiver 19:26, 27 October 2021 (UTC)

@GhostRiver: How do these changes look to you?--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:44, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Much better! I've fixed a number of small issues that came up, and now I think that this one is ready to go! — GhostRiver 01:21, 31 October 2021 (UTC)