Talk:Sweetums (Parks and Recreation)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Arctic Night 08:51, 23 February 2010 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

General comments

• First sentence of 'Plot': should 'parks and recreation' be capitalised? Later on in that section it is. Not sure what the actual spelling is.
• I capitalized it. — Hunter Kahn 15:25, 23 February 2010 (UTC)
  • In the lead, 'sweetums' is not capitalised, whilst in the plot section it is. I think this should be consistent.
  • I also capitalized this. — Hunter Kahn 15:25, 23 February 2010 (UTC)
• In the first sentence of 'Cultural references' there is a reference to an earlier episode. Is this really 'cultural'? I wouldn't say so, as it's a self-reference!
• I think this should be reworded: "Leslie tells Ron she had already written a eulogy for him and it starts".
  • A similar issue came up at Talk:Galentine's Day. I explained my reasoning there, so please take a look at that discussion and see if you agree. If you don't, let me know and we'll figure out the best way to deal with it... — Hunter Kahn 15:25, 23 February 2010 (UTC)
• According to Wikipedia:Citing sources#When quoting someone, you should cite the quotation immediately after the quotation itself. I know it's a little pedantic - see User:Ealdgyth/GA review cheatsheet for reasoning. For example, 'Matt Fowler of IGN called it a "fantastic episode"' should be 'Matt Fowler of IGN called it a "fantastic episode".^[12]'.
  • I think I got them all. — Hunter Kahn 15:25, 23 February 2010 (UTC)
• The final paragraph of 'Reception' contains the word 'said' five times by my count. You may like to consider cutting it down, although this won't really affect a pass/fail or anything.
  • I replaced some, let me know if we need more. — Hunter Kahn 15:25, 23 February 2010 (UTC)
• I think that the word 'propaganda' sounds like it's pushing a bit of a POV. However, according to propaganda, the videos shown in the episode were essentially just that, propaganda, so I can't really think of anything better to say. Never mind.
  • Ok. lol — Hunter Kahn 15:25, 23 February 2010 (UTC)
• OK, I know I've already said it, but remember to cite those quotations, especially the one from The Star-Ledger!
  • Ok. — Hunter Kahn 15:25, 23 February 2010 (UTC)
• The image in the infobox should probably have some alt text. See WP:ALT#Essence for help.
  • Added. — Hunter Kahn 15:25, 23 February 2010 (UTC)

Fix these issues up and I'll happily pass this article. I can't find anything else wrong here. Arctic Night 09:21, 23 February 2010 (UTC)

OK, passed. Arctic Night 11:37, 24 February 2010 (UTC)