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Not done: it's not clear what changes you want to be made. Please mention the specific changes in a "change X to Y" format and provide a reliable source if appropriate. DannyS712 (talk) 06:57, 15 January 2019 (UTC)
Semi-protected edit request on 28 March 2019
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Not done: it's not clear what changes you want to be made. Please mention the specific changes in a "change X to Y" format and provide a reliable source if appropriate. NiciVampireHeart 18:17, 28 March 2019 (UTC)
Passed.
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GA Review
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"is a song that was recorded by American singer Ava Max" → "is a song by American singer Ava Max."
Reworded sentence — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 13:34, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
"was released on" → "The song was released on" plus this sentence should be after the writing/production one
Moved sentence after writing and production. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 13:34, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
"as the first single from her" → "as the lead single from Max's" with the appropriate wikilink
I am a bit hesitant on changing it to lead single, considering the MTV News article states that "Kings & Queens" would be the lead single, while "Sweet but Psycho" would still be included on the tracklist.
Keep as first single then as I did not know this; target single to Single (music) though
I feel like it may be an WP:OVERLINK in accordance to the phrasing that Everyday words understood by most readers in context are not usually linked. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 13:34, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
I have seen that before, but music video is commonly linked and isn't an everyday word like "grass" for example --K. Peake 16:23, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
Add for the following sentence of the lead: "The song received mixed to positive reviews from music critics" with the target and mentioning what was praised
Weren't there any other mixed/negative reviews of the song?
The majority of negative reviews I saw came from The Singles Jukebox, however I wasn't sure how to compile them into the section. Max's album has also not been released, which makes it more difficult to find song reviews in comparison to albums. Once her album is released, I will add the negative reviews onto the second paragraph. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 14:24, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
"where Max saw an increase in streams" → "with Max seeing an increase in streams"
Reworded sentence. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 15:04, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
Remove wikilinks on Artist Publishing Group and Nordic countries
Removed wikilinks. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 15:04, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
"in Sweden on October 5, 2018, for four" → "chart of Sweden on October 5, 2018, remaining at the summit for four"
Reworded sentence. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 15:04, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
"peaking at number one in both" → "and peaking at number one in both of the"
Reworded sentence. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 15:04, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
[25][26] should solely be at the end of the sentence before [27][28]
I am a bit cautious of putting the first two citations at the end of the sentence, considering WP:INTEGRITY. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 15:04, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
"The single peaked at the top of" → "The song peaked atop"
Added release year. Should I do the same to each song in the Composition and Critical reception sections? — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 15:04, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
"for selling over 1.2 million units." → "for selling 1,200,000 units in the United Kingdom."
Reworded sentence. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 15:04, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
"number one on the 2018 Irish Singles Chart Christmas number ones, beating Ariana Grande's" → "the summit on the 2018 Irish Singles Chart Christmas number ones, beating Grande's"
Reworded sentence. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 15:04, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
Give the name of the German chart
Retargeted chart name, added country name in front of chart. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 15:04, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
"on October 26, 2018, at number 82, topping" → "at number 82 on October 26, 2018, later topping"
Reworded sentence. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 15:04, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
[35] should be solely at the end of the sentence before [36]
"it was certified platinum by Recorded Music NZ (RMNZ)." → "it was later certified platinum by Recorded Music NZ (RMNZ) for selling 30,000 units in the country."
Reworded sentence. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 15:27, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
Wikilinked latter two; "music video" wikilink query is on the lead and infobox section. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 15:48, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
Have responded to this now for the other occasion --K. Peake 16:23, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
Why is there no ref(s) for this sub-section whatsoever outside of the img text?
The plot summary section does not generally need to be sourced per MOS:PLOTSOURCE, which is considered a primary source. There are some sources which give a one sentence description about the video. Should I include them as well? — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 15:48, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
That also mentions that "editors are encouraged to add sourcing if possible, as this helps discourage original research", and I do not believe it is correct to have unreferenced material in an article about a song that came out as recent as 2018. --K. Peake 16:23, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
I added as many citations as I could in the synopsis, as there were only a few sources which summarized the music video's plot in one sentence. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 17:37, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
I have re-read the mos you linked to, it seems more so to be implying that citing the actual video as a source is what could be used for the plot information and not citing nothing; only have material here that has citations and remove the rest? --K. Peake 11:33, 30 July 2020 (UTC)
Reading through WP:FILMPLOT and MOS:PLOTSOURCE, both seem to be lenient on the amount of sources used for a fictional synopsis, with the former mentioning that Since films are primary sources in their articles, basic descriptions of their plots are acceptable without reference to an outside source. I am content with keeping the three secondary sources inside the synopsis, as it would keep reduce the concern of WP:OR and confirm that it is verifiable. The synopsis should remain intact, as both the background and reception subsections include secondary sources which heavily rely on pre-existing knowledge of the plot, specifically with various comparisons to other films and music videos. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 14:42, 30 July 2020 (UTC)
"The video begins with a" → "The music video begins with a"
I am unsure about whether the LAIPA chart can be used, while the Top 40 is a radio airplay chart. I am leaning on removing the latter source, mainly as there are no other radio charts listed. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 18:13, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
WP:CHARTS says Record Report is supposed to be used for Venezuela so are you sure this is correct?
The only other sites which contain any information is Daily Mail and UNILAD. The former is a deprecated source, while I am not sure about the reliability of the latter. Removing the section would only cause WP:UNDUEWEIGHT about the song. Are there any other sources which can be used? — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 20:15, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
At the time of writing, Head Stuff was ref 50 though you have since removed it so this query is no longer relevant. --K. Peake 11:33, 30 July 2020 (UTC)
Cited as publisher. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 20:15, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
Refs 72, 73, 74 and 75 should cite Apple Music as publisher, not using via and put the retailers in brackets i.e (US); numerous ones should be cited for them though to verify that the release was indeed various
Cited publisher, added parentheses, and added GB and AU regions. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 20:15, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
Cite Monitor Latino as publisher instead for ref 77 with the wikilink and add the language parameter
Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 192 and cite Radio Airplay SRL as publisher instead
Fixed caps and cited. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 20:15, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
Remove BBC from the title of ref 194 and cite it as the publisher instead
Removed from title and cited. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 20:15, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
Final comments and verdict
On hold until the issues are fixed, after I reviewed this large article and replied to your comments over the course of just one day! --K. Peake 16:23, 29 July 2020 (UTC)
Angryjoe1111 Made a few more comments for you to address. --K. Peake 11:33, 30 July 2020 (UTC)
I have responded to the comments made above. Is it necessary to add a sample to the composition section, considering that the musical terminology would be difficult to grasp for some readers? Should I also include the release years of each song listed in the section, as it would appear disproportionate to the songs mentioned in the commercial performance section. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 14:49, 30 July 2020 (UTC)
Angryjoe1111 Adding the sample would be advisable, though the release years should not be added in that section since the songs are too close. --K. Peake 17:38, 30 July 2020 (UTC)
The sample has been added into the section; although it may appear 1 second over the maximum length stated on WP:SAMPLE, it was rounded up during the upload since the actual audio length is 18.6 seconds, which is under the 10% threshold of the 3:07 minute song duration. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 04:47, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
Angryjoe1111 Nice edition, did some brief copy editing but I am now ready to ✓Pass this! --K. Peake 06:52, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
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Did you know nomination
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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
... that Irish mental health organizations attempted to ban Ava Max's song "Sweet but Psycho" from radio airplay for "misrepresenting psychotic illnesses"? Source: "Closer to home, See Change Ireland's National Stigma Reduction Programme for mental health urged Irish broadcasters to ban the song for 'misrepresenting psychotic illnesses'."The Daily Edge
ALT1:... that the title of Ava Max's song "Sweet but Psycho" was inspired by her parents telling her "you're sweet, but you're a little psycho" when she was younger? Source: "Since I was a little kid, my parents have said that, that "I'm sweet but psycho." Like, "You're sweet, but you're a little psycho.""Paper
ALT2:... that the chorus in Ava Max's song "Sweet but Psycho" features a quotation from the American television series 30 Rock, "Grab a cop gun kinda crazy / She's poison but tasty"? Source: "The campy chorus quotes 30 Rock where Ava sings, "Grab a cop gun kinda crazy / She's poison but tasty.""Vulture
Reviewed: First DYK nomination; no need to review yet per WP:QPQ.
Improved to Good Article status by Angryjoe1111 (talk). Self-nominated at 12:12, 1 August 2020 (UTC).
Overall: Recently listed as GA, long enough, all hooks have inline citations. I find the original hook works best, though I would change 'due to the lyrics misrepresenting ...' into something more economical, like 'for misrepresenting ...'. Modussiccandi (talk) 13:39, 6 August 2020 (UTC)
Modussiccandi, I have reworded the first hook following your comments, as well as the third hook. — Angryjoe1111 (talk) 14:23, 6 August 2020 (UTC)
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