Talk:Sustainable Development Goals and Iran

Latest comment: 6 years ago by EMsmile in topic First sentence needs changing!

Clarification edit

@Corinne: Hi, The article really have been settled, I owe you one! Any way the sentence need to Clarification was edited by me. I wonder that you check them. Also about Hassan Rahimpour Azghadi, All of statements belong to himself, I cant found out the main problem. Regards! Saff V. (talk) 09:48, 26 September 2017 (UTC)Reply

Saff V. I'm sorry. I didn't see this until now. I don't see that you answered the questions that I put into the hidden notes to editors that follow the "clarification needed" tags. Even if Hassan Rahimpour Azghadi said everything in the paragraph, you still have to say that he said each thing. After the first time you mention his name, you can use his last name: Azghadi said..., Azghadi added... According to Azghadi,...  – Corinne (talk) 00:57, 19 November 2017 (UTC)Reply

First sentence needs changing! edit

I had changed the first sentence to be in accordance with the Manual of Style but you User:Miniapolis changed it back. Please check as the first sentence is meant to have the title in bold and at the start of the sentence. EMsmile (talk) 23:33, 18 November 2017 (UTC)Reply

Please see MOS:BOLDTITLE; the title is bolded in the lead sentence if doing so produces understandable English. That wasn't the case here. Pinging Corinne, who asked my opinion. All the best, Miniapolis 23:52, 18 November 2017 (UTC)Reply
Saff V. and Miniapolis I think we can put "Sustainable Development Goals" in bold. The next sentence explains that Iran pledged to carry out the agenda. However, I don't understand why the official name of the agenda is not used as the title of the article. You can then start the lead with the name of the agenda, and then follow by saying they are sustainable development goals. The way it is now, you start with "Sustainable Development Goals", and in the very next sentence you switch to the official name of the agenda.  – Corinne (talk) 01:02, 19 November 2017 (UTC)Reply
Sounds good to me, and the page can certainly be moved to a more-appropriate title. All the best, Miniapolis 01:12, 19 November 2017 (UTC)Reply
I don't think that you need a name change of the page. The more commonly used term nowadays is SDGs (not 2030 Agenda). I don't understand why you are not wiki-linking to Sustainable Development Goals in the lead?? Surely that would be an important wiki-link to add. I had it in the sentence suggestion what was undone. EMsmile (talk) 23:49, 19 November 2017 (UTC)Reply
I may be wrong, but I don't think we normally wiki-link the words from the article's title that are used at the beginning of the article and placed in bold. It is linked after that. Also, what is commonly used is not necessarily the right term to use. The right term is either the official term (and you can explain immediately after it that it is commonly known as X), or the term that used most widely throughout respected secondary sources. Miniapolis, can you help out here?  – Corinne (talk) 00:38, 20 November 2017 (UTC)Reply
The wikilink to SDGs does not need to be in the first sentence but it needs to be somewhere in the lead of the article. - Have a read of the article on SDGs and you'll see that SDGs is nowadays the term used, e.g. things like SDG6. That Vision title is explained in the history part of the SDG article. EMsmile (talk) 01:06, 20 November 2017 (UTC)Reply