Talk:Supermarine Seal II/GA1

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Amitchell125 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 18:25, 16 September 2021 (UTC)Reply


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  • Could consider creating Seal II to redirect here as that seems to be the common name after the initial statement that it was a Supermarine aircraft.
Help! Seal II already redirects to another article, and I've no idea how to proceed, apart from adding a hatnote to the other article (which I've done). Amitchell125 (talk) 06:11, 18 September 2021 (UTC)Reply
I think that's sufficient for now. There could be a requested move discussion over which of the two relatively obscure targets is the most common, but it's probably a lot more effort than it's worth. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 06:54, 18 September 2021 (UTC)Reply
I've used Aero engine, as the above link goes to a very general article. Amitchell125 (talk) 06:18, 18 September 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • "by the Royal Air Force (RAF). " overlinked and put the (RAF) after the first instance.
  • "In 1921 a Seal II was sold to the Imperial Japanese" sold the Japanese before the RAF took delivery of it? Crikey.
Hopefully now all sorted. I got confused here, mainly as nearly all the sources inerchange Seal II with Seagull (the name was changed, but only in July 1921). Amitchell125 (talk) 18:02, 18 September 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • Having said that, it says number built 1, so how did that work?
  • "produced by Supermarine's " overlinked.
  • Link "fleet spotter" in background section, just as you have in the lead.
  • Oh you have, but not first time.
  • "this happened to because" not quite right?
  • "company's Commercial Amphibian entered" overlinked.
  • " R.J. Mitchell, later to become " already linked and previously (twice) referred to as Reginald rather than R.J. (and our article is at R. J. Mitchell).
  • Everything you linked in the lead, link first time in the main body, e.g. biplane.
  • "Supermarine Channel II" put the II inside the piped link.
  • "to [13] Kasuimiguara, " odd place to drop that ref in!
  • "an RAF Display" what is this and why is it capital D?
Sentence amended, the Display (called this from 1925) was an annual event. AM

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 14:47, 17 September 2021 (UTC)Reply

@The Rambling Man: All above comments now addressed. Amitchell125 (talk) 18:02, 18 September 2021 (UTC)Reply