Talk:Sunda Empire

Latest comment: 10 months ago by Intelligentsurfer in topic Grammatical improvements

Grammatical improvements edit

"The Sunda Democratic Empire, also known as the Sunda Empire-Earth Empire or simply Sunda Empire, which was founded by Lord Rangga Edi Raharjo in Brebes, Central Java."

This sentence doesn't make sense. It is supposed to explain what Sunda Empire was. While the sentence does contain enough information for readers to understand the whole topic, it's still grammatically incorrect, and therefore needs to be fixed.

The word "which" in this sentence is not required. It is used to add more information about something that's being the topic of discussion.

Examples:

"I got a good amount of money from selling my scooter, which is good."

"We found the house in which the murder took place."

"The human rights policies, which were rolled back yesterday, caused massive riots all over the country."

Wrong examples:

"My friend's book which is fifty years old."

"What you did which was a crime against humanity."

Remove the word "which" and the two sentences above will make better sense and be more understandable. Intelligentsurfer (talk) 20:23, 15 June 2023 (UTC)Reply