Talk:Steven Donziger/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by Colin M in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 01:23, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:23, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
Comments
edit- Add alt text and "upright" to every image.
- "18 May 2020" → "May 18, 2020" (consistency; American English)
- Add a serial comma after "Toronto Star".
- Remove the comma after "law school in 1991".
- "which produced" → "that produced"
- "Washington, D.C.." → "Washington, D.C."
- "his visit to" → "he visited"
- "In order to avoid" → "To avoid"
- Add a serial comma after the first use of "Brazil".
- Wall Street Journal → The Wall Street Journal (every time)
- "judgement" → "judgment" (both times; American English)
- Add commas after "against it", "witness tampering", "phones"
- "defences" → "defenses" (American English)
- "a payment" - is the "a" necessary?
- "attorney–client" → "attorney-client" (WP:DASH)
- "misdemeanour" → "misdemeanor" (American English)
- "additional moneys" - typo?
- "concerns about coronavirus" → "coronavirus concerns"
- "coronavirus" - you mean the COVID-19 pandemic, right?
- Add a hyphen between "six month".
- Add a serial comma after "GQ magazine".
- "which has" → "that has"
- Add a comma after Alexandria Ocasio-Cortez.
- "favoured" → "favored" (American English)
- Try avoiding having every paragraph start with "In [Year], this happened..."
- The last sentence in #In_popular_culture needs a source.
- I suggest merging #Personal_life and #In_popular_culture.
- Add this date template to fix references.
- Wikilink websites in prose and in references.
- Archive sources manually or using this tool.
- FAIR → Fair
- Citation #5 is missing a date.
- Citation #30 is missing a website.
- Citation #31 is missing an access-date.
- Citation #42 should be properly cited.
- Wikilink Jonathan Watts and Alexander Zaitchik.
- Every reference should use the "last, first" name template (see #16).
- Mark references from Rolling Stone with "|url-access=limited".
- Mark references from The New York Times with "|url-access=limited".
- Mark references from Wall Street Journal with "|url-access=subcription".
- Good evening Some Dude From North Carolina. I have been through the list of comments and, in most cases, made the recommended changes. I still need to rewrite the article to reduce the instances of "In [Year], this happened...". I have a few questions about the comments:
- Changing Wall Street Journal to The Wall Street Journal: In one instance I changed the sentence structure to avoid saying "A The Wall Street Journal editorial ..." which would have sounded odd.
- additional moneys : The source does use that expression. Merriam-Webster says "in some scenarios, especially when it refers to discrete sums of money obtained from a particular source or allocated to a particular cause, money can be pluralized as moneys or monies, with the latter being the more common spelling".
- Thanks for the explanation. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 16:08, 11 July 2021 (UTC)
- Wikilinking Jonathan Watts and Alexander Zaitchik. These only appear in references. The solution I used for wikilinking them may not be appropriate. Are you able to check please?
- I changed FAIR to Fair. However, the name is an acronym and is capitalised in our article on the organisation as well as in its own literature. Is there a reason why you wanted the capitalisation removed?
- WP:ALLCAPS Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 16:08, 11 July 2021 (UTC)
- Sorry to butt in, but WP:ALLCAPS says that acronyms should (generally) be capitalized. Colin M (talk) 20:04, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
- WP:ALLCAPS Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 16:08, 11 July 2021 (UTC)
- Burrobert (talk) 13:25, 11 July 2021 (UTC)
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