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This article has been checked against the following criteria for B-class status:
Latest comment: 11 years ago3 comments2 people in discussion
This looks good but I'd suggest a couple of improvements before we complete the assessment:
The lead could stand a bit more flesh on it, at least a couple more sentences.
Some of the sentences are very long and should be broken down, for instance the lead is currently made up of just one sentence, the opening sentence of the main body runs on and on, and the second paragraph of the main body is just one long sentence -- pls check throughout.
Not that it affects assessment but the body might be enlivened by an image, if not of the man himself then perhaps something associated, like a 13 Sqn Tornado or some such (if freely available of course, and not essential).
Thanks for that. All three suggestions now actioned. Dormskirk (talk) 20:20, 25 May 2012 (UTC)Reply
Cool, I've assessed as B-Class. I've also copyedited, as I like to do, implementing a few prose/style thingies that have served me well in my own biographical articles. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 00:27, 26 May 2012 (UTC)Reply
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