Wikipedia

Talk:Stefanos Tsitsipas/GA1

< Talk:Stefanos Tsitsipas
Latest comment: 5 years ago by Matt294069 in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

Latest comment: 5 years ago43 comments2 people in discussion

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

GA toolbox
Reviewing

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: Matt294069 (talk · contribs) 02:50, 15 April 2019 (UTC)Reply

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):   d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Comments edit

Hopefully this time I will be able to do it. Matt294069 (talk) 02:50, 15 April 2019 (UTC)Reply

Lead edit

  • ...is a Greek professional tennis player. - You can remove the link here for Greece as that isn't relevant.
  • He is the youngest player ranked in the top 10 - This seems like it's goes in WP:TRIVIAL
    • Kept. Men's tennis has been dominated by older players in recent years (Seven of the current top 10 players, including the top three, are 29 or older. Additionally, no player currently under 30 years old has won a major title.). So, it is a big deal to be the youngest player in the top 10. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:57, 8 May 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • ...at the Stockholm Open towards the end of 2018, - When did he win the title?
    • Now that he won another title last week, I replaced this sentence with the number of titles he has won (the typical format for tennis players who have won multiple titles). Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:57, 8 May 2019 (UTC)Reply

Early life and background edit

  • No mention of the fact that she was a Fed Cup player for the Soviet Union.
  • Stefanos has three younger siblings, including two brothers Petros and Pavlos, and a sister Elisavet. All of his siblings are also tennis players. - This sentence could be worked on as it seems like the second sentence is just added on.
    • Re-worded to: "Stefanos has three younger siblings Petros, Pavlos, and Elisavet, all of whom are also tennis players." Sportsfan77777 (talk) 04:10, 8 May 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • He said, "My first memory is to be three and to hit balls with my father in the gap... - Who said that?
  • ...at the age of six, and has long since continued to train there. - That second part of the sentence doesn't seem to be needed here.
    • It is typical to include where players have trained in their youth. It is interesting to note that he continued to play at the same place where he started out even as a teenager. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 04:10, 8 May 2019 (UTC)Reply

Junior career edit

  • Tsitsipas is a former world No. 1 junior - This sentence just seems added on, especially when it's put into the article later on.
    • This is a topic sentence for the entire section. It's like the first sentence of the lead. You don't "need" to mention that Tsitsipas is a professional tennis player in the first sentence of the article because that will be mentioned again later in the lead. But it is still helpful to do so to set up the rest of the section. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 05:17, 8 May 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • This entire first paragraph just sounds like a list instead of what it should be in a article and that is a encyclopedia.
    • I'm not so sure what you mean here. The paragraph is written largely chronologically, and various sets of sentences are linked together. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 05:17, 8 May 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • when he partnered with Estonian player Kenneth Raisma - Estonia isn't suppose to be linked
  • Eleni Daniilidou had also won a junior Grand Slam doubles title in 1999 while representing Greece. - Is this sentence really needed?
  • Much like the first paragraph, the second one seems "listy" if that is the correct way of putting it.

Professional career edit

2013–17: Top 100, ATP semifinal, top 10 victory edit

  • ...would go on to win a total of eleven, - Eleven what?
  • ...crack the top 200 later that month. - What month was this?
  • Also towards the end of that month, - You could easily remove Also in this and it would still make sense.
  • ...in the opening round, but was unable to qualify. - Who did he lose to?
  • ...as a qualifier at the French Open, but lost to Ivo Karlović. - Which round was this?
  • Overall, he did qualify for a tour-best eight events - You could do some reshape this sentence to change this to past tense and remove the tour-best even though it might be something interesting.
    • Changed to "he qualified". Kept "tour-best" because it is simple way to express that eight is a lot. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 05:06, 8 May 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • ...became the first Greek player to be ranked in the top 100 - You could possibly add ever after first. You could also incorporate that sentence into the previous one in some way.
    • Left out, since "first" says the same thing. Re-worded to "With this run, Tsitsipas became the first Greek player to be ranked in the top 100 of the ATP rankings, accomplishing the feat at the age of 19. He also reached a high enough ranking to be named an alternate for the Next Gen ATP Finals." Sportsfan77777 (talk) 05:06, 8 May 2019 (UTC)Reply

2018: Breakthrough, Masters final, top 15 edit

  • ...his best result in the rest of the early-year hard court season was another quarterfinal at the Dubai Tennis Championships. - You could shrink this part of the sentence, to only say that he reached the quarter finals of the Dubai Tennis Championships or something similar.
    • You need to specify that this is only for the beginning of the season. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 04:54, 8 May 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • ...where tennis is still not a widely popular sport. - You could instead go where tennis isn't a widely popular sport.
  • ...at the Estoril Open, he reached another semifinal and picked up a third career top ten victory - This sentence doesn't really flow in a way that sort of makes sense.
  • He played the next Grand Slam at Wimbledon seeded for first time at No. 31. - It properly needs a reference here.
  • ... and produced his best result at a major tournament, a fourth... - This applies that this was his best ever result in a Grand Slam which we know is not true now.
  • ...defeating No. 8 Dominic Thiem, No. 10 Novak Djokovic, No. 3 Alexander Zverev, and No. 6 Kevin Anderson in succession. - This is properly for further up in the article but do really need the rankings at the time of the event.
    • I included the rankings to specify which top ten players he defeated. I assume when someone reads that he defeated four top ten players, they would want to know if he defeated something closer to No. 1, 2, 3, and 4 or No. 7, 8, 9, and 10. (The answer is in-between.) Sportsfan77777 (talk) 04:54, 8 May 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • ...saved match points in the latter two matches. Which latter matches are we talking about here?
  • ...20th birthday, but in a closer match than their first encounter. - You could remove the comma and go 20th birthday in a closer...
  • ...made his main draw debut, but was upset in the second round - State something about his 1st US Open because it doesn't look like that at the time.

2019: Australian Open semifinal, top 10 edit

  • They finished in a three-way tie for first in their round-robin group, - Is this section of the article needed or maybe better incorporated in some way.
  • ...and he also lost a match against Roger Federer. - This seems tagged on at the end.
    • Changed to "Tsitsipas's only singles win was against Frances Tiafoe, while one of his losses was against Roger Federer."
  • ...runner-up to Roger Federer - You could properly just have "runner-up to Federer..."

Playing style edit

  • Australian Open semifinal on this surface - You can properly remove the "on this service" section
  • ...players Greg Rusedski and Annabel Croft have both praised Tsitsipas's on-court - You mention Greg Rusedski comments but not Croft's comments in this section.
    • Croft's comments are similar to Rusedski's, so I only paraphrased what she said. Sportsfan77777 (talk)

Personal life edit

  • Is there a better reference for him supporting AEK Athens other than the YT video.
  • This might be just personal preference but don't try and start every paragraph with the same word instead try and shake things around.

Career statistics edit

  • Seems fine there

References edit

  • Most of the older ATP World Tour links have got the changed domain simple on it so it would probably be good idea to change those.
  • State in more detail what Reference 3 and 4 is, as it seems to be to the same website despite it being different.
  • Reference 13 is linked as suspicious so you would probably would have to change that.
  • Reference 15, 17, 21, 23 and 24 seems like it needs to have a better reference as that is coming from a blog which might include some other stuff into that mix.
    • Zoo Tennis isn't a blog. It's just hosted on the blogspot website. The articles are on the site have a similar format to those found on the ATP Tour website or Tennis.com. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 04:37, 8 May 2019 (UTC)Reply

Final Comments edit

So the article does seems OK for now but it's not something that can easily be a GA in it's current state. With a few of these changes, then it would be good. The only worry that I have with this, is the potential for WP:RECENTISM to come into play with this current player. Matt294069 (talk) 03:09, 8 May 2019 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for the review, Matt294069! I replied to everything above. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 05:36, 8 May 2019 (UTC)Reply
With regard to the recentism comment, two of the Featured Article and Featured List coordinators discussed how to handle current athletes in featured content right here. One of them said, "For article review purposes, all I ask is that an article meet the standards of the process when I review it," which the other seemed to agree with. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 05:42, 8 May 2019 (UTC)Reply
Looking through the article changes and I think they are good enough to be Good article. Just remember to keep the Good Article standard going for this article and well done Sportsfan77777 for bringing this to a GA. Matt294069 (talk) 09:56, 8 May 2019 (UTC)Reply
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
Add topic
Retrieved from "https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Talk:Stefanos_Tsitsipas/GA1&oldid=911459693"