Talk:Star Wars: The Rise of Skywalker/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by Chompy Ace in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 23:51, 14 March 2021 (UTC)
Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 23:51, 14 March 2021 (UTC)
Infobox and lead edit
- Non-free use rationale for the poster is in great shape!
- In the infobox, why do the editors, along with the cinematographer need references?
- Done removed Chompy Ace 23:56, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- The theatrical poster doesn't include any "Story by" credits, so that needs references.
- Done added with the BFI Chompy Ace 23:56, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- "Screenplay by" should be "Written by" per the theatrical poster credits.
- Done Chompy Ace 23:56, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- For writing, J. J. Abrams is credited before Chris Terrio on the poster.
- Done Chompy Ace 23:56, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- In the second paragraph, the use of "score" feels repetitive.
- Fixed Chompy Ace 23:56, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- The use of "although" and then "and turned" sounds off, maybe change the latter to "it turned".
- Done Chompy Ace 23:56, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- "and it turned" → "it turned
- Done Chompy Ace 00:30, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
- "last time" → "last time for the franchise" or something similar
- Done Chompy Ace 00:30, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
Plot edit
- Remove the comma after "nearby".
- Done Chompy Ace 23:57, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- Remove the comma after "on the Falcon".
- Done Chompy Ace 23:57, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- Plot is under 700 words, so that passes WP:FILMPLOT.
Cast edit
- "include:" → "include"
- Done Chompy Ace 23:57, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- Everything thing else looks good.
Production edit
- The reference after "May 24, 2019" isn't working.
- Done removed Chompy Ace 23:58, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- A source is needed for filming being "pushed back to August".
- Not done removed Chompy Ace 23:58, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- "The Hollywood Reporter reported" seems repetitive.
- Fixed Chompy Ace 23:58, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- "The next day" - You never mentioned the original date.
- Fixed Chompy Ace 23:58, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- The reference after "to December 20, 2019" isn't working.
- Done removed Chompy Ace 23:58, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- What is the purpose of the note after "complete the story"?
- Done removed Chompy Ace 23:58, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
Marketing edit
- In this section, and in the rest of the article, change "Star Wars Celebration" to "the Star Wars Celebration".
- Done Chompy Ace 23:58, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- Add a comma after "December 18, 2019".
- Done Chompy Ace 23:58, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- "and was released" → "and were released"
- Done Chompy Ace 23:58, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- "cancelled" → "canceled"
- Done Chompy Ace 23:58, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- The last sentence in the section makes it seem like "the same day" refers to December 14, so try rewording.
- Not done per WP:TRAILER Chompy Ace 23:58, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
Release edit
- Both subsections here look good.
Reception edit
- Remove the comma after "$300 million".
- Done Chompy Ace 23:53, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- Add a comma after "October 21, 2019".
- Done Chompy Ace 23:53, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- "$205 million" → "$200 million" (source used)
- Done Chompy Ace 23:53, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- Add a comma after "third weekend".
- Done Chompy Ace 23:53, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- I would use this reference for the Thursday night previews.
- Done added Chompy Ace 23:53, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- What is the purpose of the following sentence?: "however, Deadline Hollywood did write that "we can't ignore" the less than stellar audience exit scores, which could affect the film's legs moving forward". Also, why is it written in present tense?
- Done removed Chompy Ace 23:53, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- Update Rotten Tomatoes.
- Done Chompy Ace 23:53, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- "33%" → "32%" (source used)
- Done Chompy Ace 23:53, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- What is the category sorting rule in the award table? Try to make it consistent (importance, alphabetical order, etc.)
- Already done alphabetical order Chompy Ace 23:53, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
References edit
- Every single source is archived.
- Link Den of Geek and don't put it in italics per consistency.
- Done Chompy Ace 23:53, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- The reference after "November 25, 2019" is missing a website (Screen Rant).
- Done Chompy Ace 23:53, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
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