Talk:St Mary's Church, Rolleston on Dove/GA1
Latest comment: 1 year ago by Amitchell125 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 09:52, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
Happy to review this article.
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Lead section, infobox edit
- Link Staffordshire; grammar school.
- Introduce Charles Eamer Kempe; Cecil Greenwood Hare.
- I would change the map to one that shows the county (eg as in St Mary's Church, Patshull).
- In the infobox, link Rolleston on Dove; Staffordshire; Archdeacon of Stoke (Archdeacon of Stoke); Rolleston: St Mary (Rolleston on Dove).
- Replace England with 'UK'.
1 Description edit
- The church is grade I listed... – this sentence could be amended to improve the prose, to something like ‘The church was grade I listed by Historic England on 12 March 1964.’
- local landowners – amend to ‘who were local landowners’?
- I would add a comma after building.
- Could you make clearer whether the Mosley family are now no longer associated with the church (or even if they still exist)?
- The Mosleys are still about. The VCH (published 2007) states they still retain the right to burial - Dumelow (talk) 12:11, 17 November 2022 (UTC)
- I would mention something to that effect in the article. Amitchell125 (talk) 14:28, 17 November 2022 (UTC)
- The Mosleys are still about. The VCH (published 2007) states they still retain the right to burial - Dumelow (talk) 12:11, 17 November 2022 (UTC)
2 Structure edit
- Link deanery; archdeanery of Stoke-upon-Trent (Archdeacon of Stoke); aisle; parapets; buttresses.
- It is constructed – it’s not clear what it is referring to.
- Add a comma after centuries.
- of the structure – 'of the church' sounds better imo.
- I’m not sure why the image is included, it’s not good enough to illustrate the text, and looks very similar to the one in the infobox. I would remove it.
3 Interior edit
- Link pulpits; Bishop of Chicester.
- with the surname of – ‘named’?
- Comma after family.
4 Churchyard edit
- Unlink Sir Oswald Mosley, 4th Baronet (duplicated link)
- One of the memorials in the churchyard, to George Ridgway – does he have more than one memorial?
- Boys – is redundant, as mixed grammar schools are a modern idea.
- Comma after gaining entrance, and after Lichfield.
6 Gallery edit
- Galleries are frowned upon in articles like this (see WP:GALLERY). If the images in the gallery serve a useful purpose in illustrating the text, they should appear nearer the relevant text, not in a separate gallery, perhaps with the use of Template:Multiple image.
7 References edit
- Ref 1 (Diocese of Lichfield) is a dead link.
- The category '13th-century church buildings in England' doesn’t match with information in the lead section.
- Ref 3 (British Listed Buildings) appears to be a self-published source, and therefore is not reliable. You need to find (an)other source(s) to replace it.
- Ref 5 (Bemrose) does not provide enough information for me to be able to verify the text, and I had to do my own search. The full citation is
- Allen, John Romily; Cox, John Charles; Jewitt, Llewellynn Frederick William (January 1908). "Pre-conquest cross at Rolleston, Staffs". The Reliquary and Illustrated Archaeologist. 14. London: Bemrose: 47–49. OCLC 931239052 – via Internet Archive.
Other edit
- The category 13th-century church buildings in England doesn’t match with information in the lead section.
- There is nothing about the present use of the building, available from here.
On hold edit
I'm putting the article on hold for a week until 27 November to allow time for the issues raised to be addressed. Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 13:24, 12 November 2022 (UTC)
- Thanks for reviewing Amitchell125. I've managed to find a reasonably priced copy of the 2007 volume of the Victoria County History for this area which I am hoping will fill in a few gaps. If you don't mind waiting until I receive that and add a little more to the article? I'll address the comments that I can in the meantime - Dumelow (talk) 08:24, 14 November 2022 (UTC)
- Thanks for letting me know, I've added a week, please let me know when you've completed all you want to do. Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 08:31, 14 November 2022 (UTC)
- Hi Amitchell125, thankyou for your patience. I think I've addressed everything above (let me know if not) but I've also added quite a bit from the new source so would appreciate a check over of that content also. Many thanks - Dumelow (talk) 15:00, 17 November 2022 (UTC)
- @Dumelow: I'll take a look, many thanks for all your work. Amitchell125 (talk) 15:13, 17 November 2022 (UTC)
- Hi Amitchell125, thankyou for your patience. I think I've addressed everything above (let me know if not) but I've also added quite a bit from the new source so would appreciate a check over of that content also. Many thanks - Dumelow (talk) 15:00, 17 November 2022 (UTC)
- Thanks for letting me know, I've added a week, please let me know when you've completed all you want to do. Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 08:31, 14 November 2022 (UTC)
Passing edit
Everything looks fine, it's an elegant little article to read. Passing now, congratulations. Amitchell125 (talk) 16:40, 17 November 2022 (UTC)