Talk:Southern California drywall strike

Latest comment: 10 years ago by VQuakr in topic Lead section

Lead section edit

The beginning of this article needs to be re-written. As noted at MOS:LEAD, the lead section should define the topic and summarize the article. Right now, the section makes several statements not referenced in the article body; and phrases such as "robber barons" should not be used outside of direct quotes because they are not neutral. VQuakr (talk) 03:38, 6 June 2013 (UTC)Reply

The revised version looks much better. Great work! VQuakr (talk) 07:42, 6 June 2013 (UTC)Reply