Talk:Somerset County Cricket Club in 1885/GA1

Latest comment: 13 years ago by Malleus Fatuorum in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Malleus Fatuorum 22:26, 16 March 2011 (UTC)Reply

Lead
  • The lead is a little too short to adequately summarise the article.
Background
  • "The county failed to live up to this ...". It's not at all clear what "this" is referring to here.
  • "Twice between 1882 and 1884 Somerset fielded as their opponents scored over 500 runs in an innings against them ...". Isn't it self-evident that Somerset must have been fielding if their opponents scored all those runs in a single innings?
Squad
  • As all the players were English, is it really necessary to have a nationality column in the table?
  • Could the table not include the number of appearances each player made during the season?
  • Three of the players have a dagger mark against their names in the squad table. What does that indicate?
County cricket
  • "Although batting was the strongest aspect of Somerset's, they were still lacking ...". There's obviously a word missing after "Somerset's".
  • Added "play" after "Somerset's", but I'd still prefer to reword it somehow, too tired to work it out at the moment, and not going to have much time on WP for the next week or so: feel free to try something yourself! Harrias talk 21:05, 17 March 2011 (UTC)Reply
  • I'd try if I was sure what it was trying to say. The sentence now reads: "Although batting was the strongest aspect of Somerset's play, they were still lacking". To what is "they" in the second clause referring? Somerset's batsmen or the team in general? Lacking what in comparison to what? Malleus Fatuorum 21:13, 17 March 2011 (UTC)Reply
  • I said I was tired! Okay, reading it, what I think I was trying to say was effectively: "Somerset were better at batting than bowling, but even that wasn't great." I'm really not in much of a state to write at the moment though: I'll try and take a look at this tomorrow if I've got a chance. Harrias talk 21:19, 17 March 2011 (UTC)Reply
  • Right, have had a shower and a cup of tea; a word with the missus, and come up with: "Although batting was the stronger aspect of Somerset's play, the club lacked the depth demonstrated by other county teams." Does that make more sense? (I can't see how it could make any less, but the point is; does it make enough?! Harrias talk 22:14, 17 March 2011 (UTC)Reply
  • "Somerset's bowlers restricted the visitors to 175 runs, in which Bastard took a career-best eight wickets in the innings ...". The "in which" clearly isn't right there.
  • "Sainsbury had utilised one less bowler than against Gloucestershire in his search for wickets ...". So presumably Sainsbury was the captain? I don't think we've said that anywhere have we?
  • What's a little confusing is that "Captain Edward Sainsbury" is mentioned in the previous paragraph. I'd forgotten the mention of Sainsbury as team captain when I came across that and assumed that "Captain" was his military rank. Malleus Fatuorum 14:34, 17 March 2011 (UTC)Reply
  • "Sainsbury bowled eight different players in an effort to take wickets ...". He didn't bowl the players.
Aftermath
  • "Somerset were stripped of their first-class status for each of three reasons". What does "for each of" mean here? Could we not just say "three reasons"?
Image
  • The licence claimed for File:HTHewett1892.jpg "life of the author plus 100 years" can't possibly be right, as the author doesn't appear to be known. If, for instance, the author was 20 years old when the image was produced and lived for another 50 years, then it wouldn't be in the public domain under those terms until 2040. As it was published before 1923, probably {{PD-US}} would be more appropriate, or {{PD-UK}}.

That's it; the review is now on hold to allow time for these issues to be addressed. Malleus Fatuorum 00:21, 17 March 2011 (UTC)Reply

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