Talk:Solar Jetman/GA1

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Reviewer: AdrianGamer (talk · contribs) 14:37, 20 September 2015 (UTC)

I should be able to get this done before Friday. AdrianGamer (talk) 14:37, 20 September 2015 (UTC)

Content

• When it was released for the "PlayChoice-10"?

• Monday, 1 January 1990, and apparently it only made 500 sales in the United States. I know, I can't believe I found it either! I'm sceptical over the New Years Day release date though, as MobyGames (which is never usually right) states it was released on PlayChoice in 1991[1]. I'm going to go with the most prominent reliable sources and state it was released later in 1990 (IGN states it released in that year, but gives no month) JAGUAR  13:48, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

• Wikilink shoot'em up in the Infobox

• Done JAGUAR  13:48, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

• Solar Jetman: Hunt for the Golden Warpship is a shooter video game developed by Zippo Games - multi-directional shooter. Sounds more accurate.

• Added JAGUAR  13:48, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

• Can we split a new paragraph for gameplay in the lead. For now it is a bit short, and it looks a bit weird. The lead does not give any indication on who Jetman is. The game's protagonist?

• Yep, I've split and expanded a new paragraph as well as clarifying the Jetman issue JAGUAR  13:48, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

• but criticism was directed at the game's hard difficulty - remove "hard" for consistency

• Done JAGUAR  13:48, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

• in similar vein to Gravitar and Thrust. - Do we really need to compare this game to these two games. They don't really help readers to understand.

• Removed JAGUAR  17:22, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

• Can we have some very brief information about who Jetman actually is and the setting of the game. It would make the remaming part of the gameplay section to feel less confusing. (For instance I have no ideas what Jetman is, why he has a pod, what planets etc.)

• Added a bit about the setting/background at the start of the gameplay section JAGUAR  17:22, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

• on each world bringing back a piece of the Golden Warpship - instead of world, use "planet"

• Done JAGUAR  17:22, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

• a piece of the Golden Warpship - Any description of what the "Golden Warpship" is?

• Added a description JAGUAR  17:22, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

• Items are collected with a tow cable that makes flight more difficult - Why?

• Elaborated JAGUAR  17:22, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

• Jetman will eject out of the pod and will walk around in an agile but vulnerable spacesuit. - do not need two "will". A space is needed after the full stop

• Fixed JAGUAR  17:22, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

• There is quite a lot of development information about this game. Therefore, about the part Rare founding the company may not be necessary.

• Cut the first paragraph, seeing as it's Ultimate Play The Game's history and not Rare's JAGUAR  17:22, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

• Solar Jetman was the first game to be released under Rare - Their first game?

• Their first game to be released under their new brand of "Rare", I've (hopefully) made it clearer JAGUAR  17:22, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

• This section seems to have assume that readers know the history of Rare. This may need some clarifications.

• I've moved some content around and explained a couple of things, I hope this sounds clearer JAGUAR  17:22, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

• Zippo Games primarily focused on developing - can be rephrased it to "Zippo Games was known for developing Ironsword".

• Done JAGUAR  17:22, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

• I do not quite get the relationship between Zippo Games and Rare

• I've explained a little. Zippo Games were independent but were bought out by Rare during development of Solar Jetman. Please let me know if anything still sounds unclear? JAGUAR  17:22, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

• The Pickford brothers started development of Iota - Is Iota the Rare's commissioned project?

• Yes, I've just added this in JAGUAR  17:22, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

• PlayChoice 10 was not mentioned in the development and release section.

• Added JAGUAR  17:22, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

• to a workforce of several people - Any information on how many there actually is?

• Afraid not, the source only says "several" JAGUAR  17:22, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

• announced ports and screenshots - screenshots would not be "announced"

• Rephrased JAGUAR  17:22, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

• The reception section is very short. It needs some expansion.

• I've done what I could by making the most out of the game's (only) three reviews JAGUAR  17:39, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

• The part about it having a poor sales should be mentioned again in the reception section.

• Added JAGUAR  17:39, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

• Why the Ultimate Play The Game Template is here when it was developed under the name "Rare"?

• You're right, it shouldn't have been there. Removed JAGUAR  17:39, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

• The article says "presented in a horizontal wrap around environment", which I don't think is correct. I'm pretty sure there's no horizontal wrapping on this game, and viewing the various maps and walkthroughs online shows no evidence of wrapping. 141.142.42.15 (talk) 16:07, 13 January 2016 (UTC)gauauu

References

• The gameplay section only have one source. Can some of the review sources be moved to the gameplay section?

• I've added some citations from the Total! review, as the reviewer was kind enough to devote an entire two pages to the gameplay! JAGUAR  17:41, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

• Should be quality over quantity, but the number of sources used here is a bit, well, too small. Would be nice if you can add more in. It is just a suggestion.

• I've added a couple of references. That's the trouble with these old games, hardly any internet coverage... JAGUAR  17:41, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

• No dead link. Well done.

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Overall it is a nice article. However, some content is not clear to readers, especially the part about the history of Rare. The reception section needs some expansion. With all the issues fixed the article should be good to go.

@AdrianGamer: thanks for the review! I hope I've addressed everything, if you can take a look? Whilst looking for more sources I found the actual release date from Giant Bomb, so I've added that in the article. Miraculously, I also found the exact date development began from the Pickford brothers' website. I really wasn't expecting that! JAGUAR  17:47, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

With all the issues fixed, the article is good to go! Solar Jetman is now a . Congratulations. AdrianGamer (talk) 00:46, 27 September 2015 (UTC)