Talk:Soetran/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gerald Waldo Luis (talk · contribs) 15:02, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

I will review this article. This is my first bio GAN I review, and I would love to learn many things from this decision. GeraldWL 15:02, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

Lead

• Keep either "Indonesian" or "Javanese." "Javanese" already covers Indonesia as a whole. In addition, recommend linking. GeraldWL 15:07, 14 December 2020 (UTC)
• Link regent. GeraldWL 15:07, 14 December 2020 (UTC)
• Link Trenggalek. GeraldWL 15:07, 14 December 2020 (UTC)
• Link Irian Jaya. GeraldWL 15:07, 14 December 2020 (UTC)
• Per tag, I suggest expanding the lead. GeraldWL 14:05, 17 December 2020 (UTC)

 Done and lead expanded. Regards, Jeromi Mikhael ^(marhata) 14:29, 17 December 2020 (UTC)

Military career

• Paragraphs 1, 2, and 3 used two citations, placed them at the same place. Mind relocating to the claim(s) it supports? GeraldWL 07:28, 15 December 2020 (UTC)

 Done except for the 3rd paragraph; citation 1 and 2 is reinforcing each other regarding the dates and fact. --Regards, Jeromi Mikhael ^(marhata) 13:47, 17 December 2020 (UTC)

• "After the war"-- what war? GeraldWL 07:28, 15 December 2020 (UTC)

 Done --Regards, Jeromi Mikhael ^(marhata) 13:47, 17 December 2020 (UTC)

Trenggalek to Trenggalih

• The subsection name is not so clear. Suggest renaming to "Renaming Trenggalek" GeraldWL 07:28, 15 December 2020 (UTC)

 Done --Regards, Jeromi Mikhael ^(marhata) 13:47, 17 December 2020 (UTC)

• There's no word on the aftermath: is it renamed or not. Suggest adding that up, if there is one. GeraldWL 07:28, 15 December 2020 (UTC)

 Done --Regards, Jeromi Mikhael ^(marhata) 13:47, 17 December 2020 (UTC)

Parasamya Purnakarya Nugraha

• First two sentence supported by two citations. Suggest relocate. GeraldWL 07:28, 15 December 2020 (UTC)

 Done --Regards, Jeromi Mikhael ^(marhata) 13:47, 17 December 2020 (UTC)

Legacy

• "the Soetran award"-- suggest capitalizing to "the Soetran Award." GeraldWL 07:28, 15 December 2020 (UTC)

 Done --Regards, Jeromi Mikhael ^(marhata) 13:47, 17 December 2020 (UTC)

Infobox

• Three redlinks. Either interwiki link, create stub (if person warrants a WP article), or remove redlinks. GeraldWL 15:07, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

 Done Removed redlinks. Regards, Jeromi Mikhael ^(marhata) 00:48, 15 December 2020 (UTC)

Governor of Irian Jaya

• Link Irian Jaya. GeraldWL 14:08, 17 December 2020 (UTC)
• Acub Zainal is redlinked. Suggest removing. GeraldWL 14:08, 17 December 2020 (UTC)

 Done except point 1, as it is already linked in the lead. Regards, Jeromi Mikhael ^(marhata) 14:29, 17 December 2020 (UTC)

Irian Jaya earthquake

• "As a result, 12 large villages in the X Valley were swallowed by the Earth." What is "X Valley" and suggest rewording the metaphoric "swallowed by the Earth." GeraldWL 09:10, 18 December 2020 (UTC)

 Done Ah, my apologies. The X Valley was without name prior to the 2000s; it is now known as the Baliem Valley. Regards, Jeromi Mikhael ^(marhata) 12:35, 18 December 2020 (UTC)

Jeromi Mikhael, last thing: in paragraph 3, ref 31 and 27 is used at the same time. Similar case at "Death", last sentence. Mind relocating or removing one of them, if appropriate? GeraldWL 12:53, 18 December 2020 (UTC)

 Done Regards, Jeromi Mikhael ^(marhata) 13:01, 18 December 2020 (UTC)

Jeromi Mikhael, in my opinon this has passed the GA criteria. Congrats! GeraldWL 13:03, 18 December 2020 (UTC)

Comments

Gerald Waldo Luis, I've done what you requested. Please check. Regards, Jeromi Mikhael ^(marhata) 14:29, 17 December 2020 (UTC)

Jeromi Mikhael, see "Irian Jaya earthquake" above. After that is resolved, I'll do a linking copyedit, and that should make it for a good article. Apologies for the wait. GeraldWL 09:11, 18 December 2020 (UTC)

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