Talk:Slow Down Baby/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 23:52, 3 March 2012 (UTC)

Hello, I will be reviewing this article. Aaron • ^{You Da One} 23:52, 3 March 2012 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Infobox

Resolved comments

• Only one point, Pop should come before R&B and P comes before R.  Done

Lead

Resolved comments

• Musically, "Slow Down Baby" is an R&B and pop song with funk, hip hop and soul elements and backed by horns and pianos. → Bit of a mouthful, change to: "Musically, "Slow Down Baby" is a Pop and R&B song, and incorporates elements of funk, hip hop and soul genres. Instrumentation consists of horns and and a piano.  Done
• The song received generally positive reviews from music critics → The song garnered positive reviews from music critics  Done
• many of whom named it one of the album's standouts. → many of whom cited it as a standout track on Back to Basics.  Done
• Its blend of old and modern R&B and Aguilera's vocals also received critical praise. → Critics also praised its blend of old and modern R&B influences, as well as Aguilera's vocal performance.  Done
• The single was exclusively → The song was released only  Done
• Put the year in brackets after the tour.  Done
• The song received no direct promotion and managed to peak at number 21 on the Australian Singles Chart. → "Slow Down Baby" peaked at number 21 on the Australian Singles Chart, although it did not receive any promotion in that country.  Done

Background

Resolved comments

• two distinct discs. → Remove "distinct".  Done
• more beat-driven producers → What does this mean? All songs have beats.

Added quotations marks, as it was what Christina said. Pancake (talk) 12:56, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

• and used plenty of samples in the production → Poor phrasing.  Done
• , while the second disc consists solely of collaborations with producer Linda Perry. → . The second disc...  Done
• Aguilera sent a letter to different producers → Shouldn't it be letters ?  Done
• and Ronson completed the production with assistance by Aguilera. → Why is she not in the info box as a producer?  Done
• "someone like" → Why is this quoted?  Done
• while Angry played the claviola, organ → Include these two in the Lead and composition, as you currently do not.  Done

Composition

Resolved comments

• Pop before R&B  Done
• No other issues :)

Critical reception

Resolved comments

• Full of quotes. Paraphrase quite a few of them. Try and follow a "quote - paraphrase quote - quote" perhaps? Just an idea.

Haha don't know if it's enough, but I tried. Pancake (talk) 12:56, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

• Year in brackets for the name of the tour in the picture.  Done

Chart performance

Resolved comments

• exclusively → Remove  Done
• before falling off. → Superflueous, remove.  Done

Live performances

Resolved comments

• and the older singles → and other songs, including  Done
• The performance was preceded by newspapers headlines such as, "Christina goes from 'dirrty' to demure" and "Christina cleans up her act", that flashed across the screen. → Not sure what you mean by this? So before she came on stage, headlines were flashed on a screen?

Yes. Pancake (talk) 12:56, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

Could you reword it to say that then? Aaron • ^{You Da One}

Done I guess. Pancake (talk) 13:16, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

• sported → Use a different word.  Done

Formats and track listing

Resolved comments

• No issues.

Credits and personnel

Resolved comments

• No issues.

Charts

Resolved comments

• No issues.

Other

Resolved comments

• Why is there not a release history table?

  Is it necessary to have a table for just one country and one date? Pancake (talk) 12:56, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

  Of course. It doesn't make it any less important. Aaron • ^{You Da One} 13:01, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

  Added. Pancake (talk) 13:16, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

  And a Label column, like this. Aaron • ^{You Da One} 13:19, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

  Added. Pancake (talk) 13:32, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

References

Resolved comments

• FN26: Accessdate?

Accessdates don't show if there's no URL. Pancake (talk) 12:56, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

• FN28: Should be [[Apple Inc.|Apple]]  Done

Summary

I liked reading this article, I might a listen to this song. Not too many issues to address, placing on hold for 7 days. Aaron • ^{You Da One} 16:16, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

It's a pretty nice song! I had actually never heard it before I decided to expand its article :p Pancake (talk) 13:01, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

I will have a listen. Passing :) Aaron • ^{You Da One} 13:40, 5 March 2012 (UTC)