Talk:Simele massacre/GA2
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Reviewer: Thurgate (talk · contribs) 19:22, 4 May 2012 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- prose:
(MoS):
- prose:
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars etc.:
- No edit wars etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Comments edit
1. Their historical feud with the Kurds, which culminated in 1915, is centuries old - Suggest - Their historical feud with the Kurds, which culminated in 1915, was centuries old
2. between the Assyrians and the Arabs was reported by British historians as far as the 1920s. Suggest - between the Assyrians and the Arabs was reported by British historians as far back as 1920.
3. opinion against Assyrians. Suggest opinion against the Assyrians.
4. the troops began to open an indiscriminate fire on the defenseless Assyrians. Suggest the troops began to fire indiscriminately against the defenseless Assyrians
5. The British were however recommended to transfer Bakr Sidqi, an ethnic Kurdish general, who was stationed in Mosul, to another region fearing due to his open animosity towards the Assyrians. Doesn't flow well suggest you rewrite this sentence.
6. On the long term however Suggest - In the long term however
I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow you to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns. Thurgate (talk) 19:22, 4 May 2012 (UTC)
