Talk:Shraddha Kapoor/GA3

GA Review

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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 12:25, 12 November 2013 (UTC)

I'll be glad to take this one; thanks in advance for your work on it. Comments to follow later today. -- Khazar2 (talk) 12:25, 12 November 2013 (UTC)

On first pass, this nomination looks like it covers the important aspects of the subject's career, but more copyediting will need to be done before it's ready for GA. A few examples:

• Phrases like "involving the awareness for a Mother neccesity and valuement in an individuals life" and "unveiled the awareness of ammonia hair colours are not completely safe" need some copyediting to make sense
• "Kapoor has become the one of the most admired and revered actress, according to itimes poll she ranked #1 position" is a comma splice and India Times should be written with its full name and capitalized.
• ″Shraddha is on carrying Shakti Kapoor—her father gene″ is a misquotation of the source, twisting the original into a new, meaningless sentence.

So I'm closing this one for now, but please feel free to renominate once it's been thoroughly copyedited. You might consider asking another editor for help, or filing a request with the Guild of Copyeditors, who always do good work. Thanks for your work on this and good luck in revisions, Khazar2 (talk) 12:53, 12 November 2013 (UTC)