Talk:Shinkankakuha

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment

This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): LiangShuang97.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 03:32, 18 January 2022 (UTC)

Feedback

@LiangShuang97: So, your article is actually in pretty good shape! I had some concrete pieces of feedback:

• I would work on the language and writing a bit. It's not very easy for me to read.
• I would also spend more time explaining what exactly shinkankakuha is. The history section is useful but I don't quote understand what the major concept it! Is it a type of writing? Art? Film? Describing what the topic is is the most important job of Wikipedia article and I think you need to explain what it is. Can you name famous people.
• You should turn your two bibliography entries into references. Details are online at Help:Referencing for beginners.
• Made a bunch of changes in terms of Wikipedia formatting. Check out Wikipedia:Tutorial/Formatting and try to make sure that your article has links and is correct formatted.

Once you've made these changes, please go ahead and move your article into the "(Article)" namespace! Good luck! —mako๛ 00:28, 24 October 2015 (UTC)

@LiangShuang97: This is very much improved but I think there's still quite a bit of important work to do. I made a few minor changes one big one. You should look at the article history to see the changes. The big one is that I removed the section you had created on people and one reference you used inside it. The people section you left was just straight biographies about two authors associated with the movement. Although these were good, they weren't really about the topic of this article (i.e., shinkakankakuha). This article needs to focus on that topic. I removed the reference to Kawabata's Nobel Prize page because it didn't mention shinkakankakuha at all.

I still think additional references would help establish both the facts in here and the notability of this concept. Can you find more references? —mako๛ 16:38, 27 October 2015 (UTC)