Talk:SheiKra/GA1
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Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 20:09, 7 February 2013 (UTC)
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- Lead
- I did a little reorganizement of content in the lead.
- Maybe the world record will benefit from a citation there.
- History
- "One of the billboards said, "SEEKING, One last fling while I've still got it. Sheikra (w/ floor) 1-888-388-3088."" I don't find this encyclopedic, and it also gives a number.
- Are phone numbers not allowed (its a toll free one anyway so its not a personal phone number)? Also, its info about a promotion the park used for the attraction.--Dom497 (talk) 19:55, 14 February 2013 (UTC)
- Indeed, phone numbers are not allowed. WP:DIRECTORY#3: "Contact information such as phone numbers, fax numbers and e-mail addresses are not encyclopedic." — ΛΧΣ21 20:07, 14 February 2013 (UTC)
- Are phone numbers not allowed (its a toll free one anyway so its not a personal phone number)? Also, its info about a promotion the park used for the attraction.--Dom497 (talk) 19:55, 14 February 2013 (UTC)
- Same for the following sentence.
- Ride experience
- I find the queue section a bit weird and unnecessary.
- Characteristics
- "located in Batavia, Ohio" comma needed after Ohio.
- Reception
- The paragraph is way too long. Consider splitting it into shorter ones.
- I split it into two paragraph's where the first is from enthusiast's while the other one is from newspapers. Good?--Dom497 (talk) 19:39, 14 February 2013 (UTC)
Everything else seems good. Regards. — ΛΧΣ21 17:46, 14 February 2013 (UTC)