Talk:Shah Budak/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Aintabli (talk · contribs) 02:39, 6 March 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Crisco 1492 (talk · contribs) 14:57, 27 September 2024 (UTC)

Prose review

• You link Turkmen to Oghuz Turks here but to Turkoman (ethnonym) at Malik Arslan. Which is correct?

  Answered in the other review.

• succession - would accession be a better word?

   Done

• Shah Suwar crushed his brother near Zamantu Castle - he didn't crush his brother. His forces defeated those of his brother. Per WP:SLANG, we should present this in a more encyclopedic tone.
• Zamantu Castle - Per Wikipedia:LEASTASTONISHMENT, Zamantu might be better unlinked; one would expect the article to be one on the castle.

  Removed.

• Shah Budak blinded Shahruh in retribution for the treatment his son Feyyaz had received in 1484. - No indication what this treatment was.

  Changed to "defeated" and "overpowered".

• worsting - ?

  Ouster? Aintabli (talk) 00:02, 1 October 2024 (UTC)

  That works.  — Chris Woodrich (talk) 17:24, 1 October 2024 (UTC)

• Generally, foreign language terms that have not been adapted to English should be italicized (see MOS:NON-ENG)

   Done Aintabli (talk) 00:06, 1 October 2024 (UTC)

Image review

No images

• Added custom map with a few labels for some of the towns mentioned in the text. Aintabli (talk) 00:06, 1 October 2024 (UTC)

  Oh, I just meant that to indicate that I've looked (in case things change down the line). That being said, the map looks excellent.  — Chris Woodrich (talk) 17:24, 1 October 2024 (UTC)

Source review

• All sources look to be reliable.
• No close paraphrasing detected through Earwig.

Conclusion

• Looks pretty good. I've made some edits; please review them. Only a few nitpicks to resolve. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 15:02, 27 September 2024 (UTC)

• Alright, that was a short and sweet review. Happy to pass this as a GA! — Chris Woodrich (talk) 17:24, 1 October 2024 (UTC)

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