Talk:Shachar Sagiv

Latest comment: 31 minutes ago by Zanahary in topic Did you know nomination

Did you know nomination

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Sagiv in 2022
  • Source: Supporting articles are here (Triathlon Start List for the Paris 2024 Olympics) and here (that the brother and father are Olympians).
  • Reviewed: Tobie Goedewaagen
  • Comment: Nominated by Schwede66 on behalf of an IP editor, who will also provide the QPQ.
5x expanded by 2603:7000:2101:AA00:DD64:E22E:2B9C:8DC (talk) and Schwede66 (talk). Number of QPQs required: 1. Nominator has 145 past nominations.

Schwede66 03:02, 11 June 2024 (UTC).Reply

  •   Although the hook is shorter than 200 characters (at 185 characters), it does seem pretty long and a bit hard to read. I understand it might be difficult to compress the hook into a more concise one, but if that's possible I would suggest doing so anyway. Otherwise, another concern I have is that it's not exactly that uncommon for Olympic athletes to be relatives of other Olympians, and in any case the hook seems more to do with Sagiv's family than he himself. I'd like to see more suggestions that are more about Sagiv himself. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 10:51, 16 June 2024 (UTC)Reply
I'm a well-known athletics hook hater, but this one is actually unusual and interesting, IMO. Zanahary 06:03, 20 June 2024 (UTC)Reply
Actually, it’s indeed rare to have two Olympians who are brothers and who also have a father who is an Olympian. And there is ample coverage of this fact in RSs in regard to him and his family precisely because it is notable. 2603:7000:2101:AA00:C1F0:2A4D:7D90:217B (talk) 08:12, 17 June 2024 (UTC)Reply
To shorten the hook even further than 185 characters, though I think 185 is appropriately concise, one might consider changing the lead-in of the hook to "that triathlete Shachar Sagiv, who will represent Israel at the 2024 Summer Olympics ..." That would bring the character count down 11, to a tidy 174, 26 characters short of the limit.


In addition, we can bold Ran Sagiv and make the hook about his 5x expansion as well.2603:7000:2101:AA00:A407:4587:FBA9:6E1B (talk) 04:54, 18 June 2024 (UTC)Reply