Talk:Seth Bogart (album)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 13:33, 15 June 2016 (UTC)

Hi there! I'm Cartoon network freak and here's my review for your GAN:

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• Seth Bogart is the second overall solo studio album written, recorded and performed by Hunx and His Punx vocalist Seth Bogart. -> Seth Bogart is an eponymos and the second studio album recorded by American recording artist Seth Borgart.
• It is the first studio LP to be released under his name, as his previous solo record Hairdresser was issued under his stage name Hunx. -> It was released on February 19, 2016 through Burger Records. Seth Bogart marks the first record issued under his stage name, as its predecessor was credited to stage name Hunx.
• Bogart had enjoyed making music as his Hunx character, but had wanted for a long time to start recording material that showed more of his true self, "like a weird teenager’s version of an adult album" as he said in an interview. Therefore, he decide to take more than two years to make the album, unlike during his Hunx period where he would make a record in five days or less. Seth Bogart was produced and co-written by Cole MGN, and also features vocal performances from Chela, Kathleen Hanna, Tavi Gevinson, Jeremiah Nadya and Clementine Creevy. -> Bogart had enjoyed being active as his Hunx character, but had wanted to start recording material that showed more of his true self, "like a weird teenager's version of an adult album". The record was finalized throughout two years, with writing and producing being handled by himself and Cole MGN. It featured the vocal collaboration of Chela, Kathleen Hanna, Tavi Gevinson, Jeremiah Nadya and Clementine Creevy on selected tracks.
• Upon its February 2016 Burger Records release, the album was praised by some reviewers for its concept of fakeness of apparent beauty in celebrity and fashion culture, as symbolized in its use of cheap keyboard sounds and vocal effects such as autotune. There were also critics that complimented its combination of elements of punk and pop music and liked it as being a fun record.-> Upon its premiere, the record was praised by music critics for its reference to celebrity and fashion culture, characterized through the use of cheap keyboard sounds and the processing of Bogart's vocals with AutoTune for its material.
• There were also critics that complimented its combination of elements of punk and pop music and liked it as being a fun record. -> Other reviewers complimented the album's punk and pop sound, with them calling it a "fun record".

Infobox

• In which formats was the album released? Maybe a release history-section would be helpful here.
• Which genres were used through the album?
• Were there singles released from the record?

Track information

• Change name of the section into "Material"
• with the lo-fi -> with the lo-fi recording
• content, with the song compared by one reviewer to a more "produced" Japandroids track. -> content. The song was particularly compared by one reviewer to s more "produced" Japanoids track.
• As a reviewer described "Eating Makeup": "What begins as a lick or a curiosity turns into a full-blown obsession, and all of a sudden, you're sprawled in the center of Sephora, covered in opened concealer. Eventually, Bogart concludes gleefully, 'everybody's eating makeup'" -> Pitchfork Media described the track as beginning "as a lick of curiosity [turning] into a full-blown obsession, and all of sudden, you're sprawled in the center of Sephora, covered in opened concealer. Eventually, Bogart concludes gleefully, 'everybody's eating makeup'".
• true personality is removed -> true personality is affected
• It is instrumentally driven by a restrained synthesizer line that -> Its instrumentation is driven by a restrained synthesizer line that
• Unlink Pitchfork Media here, as it was used before
• may have be -> may have been
• The song is followed in the album's track listing by "Smash the TV", which is about the narrator's attraction to someone he only sees on a television show. -> The lyrical message of another track of Seth Bogart, "Smash the TV", portrays the narrator's attraction to someone he only sees on a television show.
• song I’ve ever -> song [he has] ever
• having a crush someone whose just turned twenty-one years of age -> colliding with someone who has just turned twenty-one years old
• title,[5] and musically has "a nice digital gloss to it, as well as some tender guitar hooks" as a reviewer for Exclaim! wrote. -> title.[5] It musically incorporates "a nice digital gloss to it, as well as some tender guitar hooks", as a reviewer of Exclaim! wrote.

Release and promotion

• These videos include -> These videos included
• the album in an October 2, 2015 interview with the -> the album on October 2, 2015, when interviewed by
• with the album's Burger Records February 19, 2016 -> remove "Burger Records" from the sentence
• The "track information" section and this are quite based on the same information

Tracklist

• Change name of section to "Track listing"
• The track list should incorporate a header, e.g. like on I Am the Club Rocker for example
• Where are the writing and producing credits adapted from? You should use AV media cite, e.g. like on I Am the Club Rocker for example
• There is no link or citation provided to accompany the track list!
• You should leave out the note on top of this section and include the names of the writers and producers in the table

References

• No flaws in formatting...

Outcome

I've reviewed a select few sections, but as you can see, there are a substantial amount of basic errors. However, I think the first step would be to request the article be copy-edited, and then even request someone to help you improve the article (however, I'd discourage asking me as I'd quite like to re-review this when it's been worked on, and if I've worked on it, I can't review it!) Until then I'm failing this. Best of luck, Cartoon network freak (talk) 00:41, 20 June 2016 (UTC)

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