Talk:Serious (Gwen Stefani song)/GA1

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Aoba47 in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 00:20, 10 August 2016 (UTC)Reply

I will gladly take this for review. I will have my review up as soon as possible. Aoba47 (talk) 00:20, 10 August 2016 (UTC)Reply

  • Please add ALTs for the two images in the article.
  • I do not believe the transition “Musically” is necessary in the final sentence of the last paragraph of the lead.
  • In the final sentence of the first paragraph of the “Background and composition” section, Reference 3 needs to go in front of Reference 4.
  • I am a little confused about the first paragraph of that aforementioned section. If possible could you answer the following questions? How does Stefani’s quote connect with the song exactly? Why did Stefani decide to record “Serious”, “Crash”, and “Luxurious” and release them if she was not satisfied? I would suggest making this information clearer to the reader. (I could be missing something here as I have not look thoroughly at the reference yet)
  • What does this statement: (The project's work resulted in a six month hiatus, before the singer decided to collaborate with various musicians.) have to do with the song? It seems like a rather vague sentence, especially with the “various musicians” parts, and I am not sure about the relevancy in the article. (I could be missing something)
  • Be careful of the repetition of “highly positive”. I would recommend removing and revising some of these. Saying “positive review” or some similar variant would be more appropriate.
  • I do not believe the reference directly to the YouTube video is necessary as you already have a more stable reference supporting the information about the leak.
  • Please link MTV for Reference 3.
  • Please italicize Slant Magazine in Reference 12.

Great work on this article! The only major comment I have is about the first paragraph of the “Background and composition” section as I am not sure how some of the parts connect to the song (the Beatles quote for instance), while the rest of the comments are minor and easily corrected. Let me know if you need further clarification on the above comments. This should be a quick pass once all of the comments are addressed. Aoba47 (talk) 02:19, 10 August 2016 (UTC)Reply

@Aoba47: Thanks so much for the review (as always)!! I believe I fixed everything you noted, and I hope I clarified the poorly worded sentence you pointed out. Feel free to ping me with questions. Thanks, Carbrera (talk) 02:45, 10 August 2016 (UTC).Reply
Wow, that was very fast! Great job again with the article. I know it can be difficult to gather information and write an article about an album track so I applaud your work. This is a definite  Pass. Good luck with the rest of the Gwen Stefani-related articles! Aoba47 (talk) 02:48, 10 August 2016 (UTC)Reply