Talk:Serbian State Guard/GA1

Latest comment: 11 years ago by Peacemaker67 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Dank (talk · contribs) 03:11, 24 February 2013 (UTC)Reply

Hi, I'll have a look at this in the morning. - Dank (push to talk) 03:11, 24 February 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • "Higher SS and Police Leader": It's generally better to link an entire proper noun: Higher SS and Police Leader (here and also in the text)
  • "As part of its role, it assisted the Germans to impose ...": Omit the first part: "It assisted the Germans in imposing ..."
  • "a military government. This was due to the key rail ...": a military government, to exploit the key rail ...
  • "(Serbo-Croatian: Vlada Nacionalnog Spasa, Влада Националног Спаса)": The question here is whether the reader is likely to know this is supposed to be Serbo-Croatian ... since you mention it in the lead, they probably will know (and you omit mention of the language later on), so omit "Serbo-Croatian" here.
  • "five regions (oblast)": Okay, my Serbo-Croatian is a little rusty :) But isn't oblast singular? It should be plural here. Likewise for "three districts (okrug)".
  • "It was royalist in sympathy, pro-Chetnik, and was rapidly infiltrated by Chetniks loyal to Draža Mihailović, did not have enough officers, and after some initial successes, was never an effective military force.": That could be clearer.
  • "executing or delivering to the Germans for execution people from those groups": executing people from those groups or delivering them to the Germans for execution
  • "the SDS had reduced": the SDS had been reduced, or declined
  • "the 'worst troops in the world'.": double quote marks
  • "the either the": either the
  • Alphabetize the book references.
  • I'm not the best on whether this covers "major aspects", but my understanding is that will be covered at A-class.
  • The "toolbox" above reports no problems.
  • Otherwise:
  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose quality:   Yes
    B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:   Yes
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. Has an appropriate reference section:   Yes
    B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:   Yes
    C. No original research:   Yes
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:   Yes
    B. Focused:   Yes
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:   Yes
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:   Yes
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:   Yes. Images are good.
    B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:   Yes
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail: Pass. - Dank (push to talk) 02:15, 27 February 2013 (UTC)Reply

Thanks Dan! Peacemaker67 (send... over) 02:16, 27 February 2013 (UTC)Reply