Talk:Secretarybird/GA1
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 10:14, 12 April 2020 (UTC)
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- "mostly terrestrial" this made me smile. I think I understand this is intended to mean "ground-borne" but it kind of got me thinking about extra-terrestrial secretarybirds too...
- I'm interested as to why this isn't at "Secretary bird", it seems to be far more common to have the space. Indeed, I've been lucky enough to see these and read about them and today was the first time I noticed that the unspaced variant was acceptable, nay even the "common" name...
- I admit I was surprised by your ngram result. My preference is to follow the IOC in all cases as this avoids lots of time consuming argument. For interest I checked the other world lists. The Handbook of Birds of the World and the Clements checklist both use secretarybird but the fourth edition of Howard and Moore uses secretary-bird. - Aa77zz (talk) 16:25, 12 April 2020 (UTC)
- But we regularly digress from the IOC on capitalisation, don't we? The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 16:41, 12 April 2020 (UTC)
- Their rules which we explicitly ignore for their example i.e. yellow-throated warbler... The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 16:48, 12 April 2020 (UTC)
- Well, as you may remember, we had a rather heated discussion in 2014, where the bird editors (almost all of whom favoured capitalisation) were outvoted by the editing community at large. So it was democracy I guess... Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:18, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
- I admit I was surprised by your ngram result. My preference is to follow the IOC in all cases as this avoids lots of time consuming argument. For interest I checked the other world lists. The Handbook of Birds of the World and the Clements checklist both use secretarybird but the fourth edition of Howard and Moore uses secretary-bird. - Aa77zz (talk) 16:25, 12 April 2020 (UTC)
- " diurnal raptors" bit sea of blue here, I was literally expecting an article about "diurnal raptors".
- recognizable vs savannah, that's USEng vs BritEng. Pick one and use it.
- I would think its vulnerable status would be suitable for inclusion in the lead.
- "one to three eggs is laid. All three young " one to three, then "all three" is a bit jarring.
- "birds of prey" and "raptor" offer the same link in the lead, so that's really overlinking.
- "height to as much as 1.3 m (4.3 ft) tall" no need for "tall" in this construction.
- "In 1779 the English" no comma and the vs "In 1835, Irish naturalist" comma and no the.
- In general avoid false titles.
- Where is "Senegambia"?
- Sagittariidae, Pandionidae, Accipitridae and Cathartidae are all overlinked.
- "enigmatic bird Eremopezus " is "enigmatic" a biological term here? Our article says it only exists in fossils, so I guess that's pretty damned enigmatic...
- Happy to go with any other more Anglo-saxon adjective that conveys the same meaning - in this case "little-known" but with an added twist of taxonomic uncertainty...might be a ratite or might be related to this critter...so could change to "little-known" or "poorly-known" I guess...IFYSWIM? Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 22:43, 12 April 2020 (UTC)
- No need to link major unambiguous geographical entities, like France.
- Accipitridae is mentioned before accipitrid but not linked.
- I see the IOC calls it Secretarybird and that could be a reason for our own title, but we often ignore the IOC for issues such as capitalisation so if that's the only reason the article is as titled, I remain to be convinced.
- We'd agreed to follow IOC as default until gazumped by the 2014 capitalisation debate. So now IOC is default unless someone proposes and gains consensus for a page move. Lots of sources use both - and it seems as though newer sources tend to use the term unspaced as one word whereas older sources tend to use two words spaced. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:26, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
- I think the ngrams I posted above demonstrates that the spaced version is by far the common name in most of the rest of the universe. But you're right, this isn't a requested move, it's just a surprised shrug of the shoulders that we aren't applying COMMONNAME. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 18:06, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
- We'd agreed to follow IOC as default until gazumped by the 2014 capitalisation debate. So now IOC is default unless someone proposes and gains consensus for a page move. Lots of sources use both - and it seems as though newer sources tend to use the term unspaced as one word whereas older sources tend to use two words spaced. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:26, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
- "raptor" in the Description section is overlinked.
- "sub-terminal.[26][23] ref order.
- thowing - typo.
- "or an irruption or rodents" of rodents??
- Could link thermals.
- "hoarse growling" vs "guttural croaking"...
- "2-3 eggs" en-dash, and I'm sure in the lead it was 1 to 3?
- "1.0–1.5 metres (3–5 ft) across with a depth 30–50 centimetres" no need for expanded metres/centimetres suddenly here.
- "clutch of 3 eggs" three.
- "at the Oklahoma City Zoo built " no need to so quickly repeat the zoo name.
- "The species now successfully breeds in captivity around the world," I wasn't sure I could find the "around the world" noted in the reference for this sentence.
- Link carrion.
- "to 5 times" five.
- " them down and pin then" ->" knock them down then pin them..."
- "(approx. 3200BC)" -> "(c. 3200 BC)"
That's all I have on a quick run through. Hopefully some of it's helpful. It's on hold. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 15:20, 12 April 2020 (UTC)
No problem everyone, I thoroughly enjoyed the article which is beyond GA quality. I hope to see it at FAC soon. I'm promoting, as the name issue is somewhat outside the scope of the GA criteria, but I would still be interested to see any justification, especially if this does go to FAC. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 08:09, 14 April 2020 (UTC)