Talk:Sebele II/GA1

Latest comment: 6 days ago by Averageuntitleduser in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Nominator: Thebiguglyalien (talk · contribs) 05:42, 10 April 2024 (UTC)Reply

Reviewer: Averageuntitleduser (talk · contribs) 19:51, 11 May 2024 (UTC)Reply

Getting some practice in for the Developing Countries WikiContest. This should be fun! Averageuntitleduser (talk) 19:51, 11 May 2024 (UTC)Reply

Well-written edit

Lovely article! To begin:

  • Is there some noteworthy difference between the "Kwena" and "Bakwena" titles? If not, I would use the latter consistently.
  • Perhaps link "senior wife".
  • Sebele's father had already allowed Anglicanism to be practiced by the Bakwena — forgive me if I am missing something, but how did this anger the London Missionary Society? Being an interdenominational.. misionnary organization.. it seems to check out.
  • over the protectorate — perhaps the full "Bechuanaland Protectorate".
  • Upon returning to Ntsweng, — perhaps move this to the end of the sentence to avoid "Ntsweng" seeming like part of the list.
  • but Moruakgomo remained a pretender — this is a pretty passive first mention, perhaps something along the lines of: "which Moruakgomo contradicted, as he had become a prentender".

Verifiable with no original research edit

Thoroughly sourced to reliable sources. We appear to be dealing with prominent authors and publishers, as well as peer-reviewed journals. No issues with close paraphrasing were found during the spot-check.

Spot-check edit

  • Gulbrandsen, Ørnulf (2012). The State and the Social: State Formation in Botswana and its Precolonial and Colonial Genealogies. Berghahn Books. ISBN 978-0-85745-298-6.
    • Looks good  Y
  • Makgala, Christian John (2008). "Bakgalagadi Opposition to Subservience and Exploitation in Tsetseng, c.1918-1953". Botswana Notes and Records. 40: 60–73. ISSN 0525-5090. JSTOR 41236033.
    • Looks good  Y
  • Ramsay, Jeff (1996). "The Fall and Decline of the Bakwena Monarchy". Botswana Notes and Records. 28: 65–86.
    • Looks good as well!  Y

Broad in its coverage edit

General Google searching show results with sparse coverage. Having looked around some scholarly databases (Springer, Taylor & Francis, Google Scholar, JSTOR), I feel confident that this article covers all the bases. At first, I thought the article was missing The Birth of Botswana: A History of the Bechuanaland Protectorate from 1910 to 1966, but looking at the authors, it most definitely seems to have been repurposed for the Historical Dictionary of Botswana. Looks good.

Neutral edit

No issues; his controversy among the London Missionary Society and advisors is well-balanced with his popularity among the community.

Stable edit

No recent content disputes or edit wars.

Illustrated edit

Looks good. Only one image is used, the infobox portrait, which seems to have a reasonable FUR.

Summary edit

Courtesy ping, @Thebiguglyalien: good work on the article! I'll get on with the spot-check. Averageuntitleduser (talk) 00:36, 18 May 2024 (UTC)Reply

Averageuntitleduser, I've made the suggested changes. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 04:46, 18 May 2024 (UTC)Reply
I like them, and the Anglicanism bit makes much more sense! Happy to promote. Averageuntitleduser (talk) 11:34, 19 May 2024 (UTC)Reply
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