Talk:Seaforth railway station/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:33, 28 April 2022 (UTC)

Comments

• I would expect "off-peak services" to be hyphenated.
• "The station is between... The station is 22.6..." mildly repetitive.
• "two side platforms. The platforms are " merge i.e. "two side platforms which are "
• "long, or long enough" awkward reading.
• "four car train" etc, shouldn't this be "four-car train"?
• "After agitation by" what does this mean?
• "known as "Woop Woop". Seaforth" this is worth a footnote to explain to non-Aus/NZ readers what that actually means.
• "In 1968, high level platforms..." not keen on single-sentence paras, and this thus suggests that no significant work has been conducted on the station for more than 50 years?
  • I put this as its own paragraph because it two decades after everything else. It is correct to assume that no significant work has been done for over 50 years. There would have been minor things such as repainting, new signage and the like, but nothing worth adding. They haven't even added tactile paving. Steelkamp (talk) 04:49, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
• "during peak. Between peaks" repetitive.
• "stop at all stops" again, I know it's literally true but it makes for clumsy reading.
• "In 2018, City of Armadale Mayor Henry Zelones said that several hundred hectares of vacant land nearby is set " odd tense, and is there any update, four years later?
  • I've modified this sentence slightly. There is no update. I believe the land in question is still planned for development, but no construction has started. Steelkamp (talk) 04:49, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
• Note B could use a reference.

Nothing too drastic here, so on hold. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 15:47, 1 May 2022 (UTC)

• I have fixed all the things you have pointed out and have replied to two of them. Steelkamp (talk) 04:49, 2 May 2022 (UTC)