Talk:Schiehallion experiment/GA1

Latest comment: 15 years ago by Reyk in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars etc.:  
    This article is only a few days old but, given the subject material, I doubt if it'll be the target of vandalism or edit warring.
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Firstly, well done on this article. It is very close to GA status and the improvements I have to suggest are nitpicky and pedantic:

  • The lead is too short and does not fully cover the contents of the article. Consider summarizing the selection of the mountain, and the experimantal method in one paragraph each.
  • There are a few single-sentence paragraphs which make the flow of the article a bit choppy. These should be either expanded or absorbed into other paragraphs.
  • There is a big, ugly white space next to Hutton's table. The text of that section should wrap around it as it does with images.
  • Direct quotations need their inline citation directly after the quote, not at the end of the sentence.

I have put this article on hold for now. When the concerns I have raised are resolved, I will have no hesitation in passing it. Again, well done on writing a very fine article. Reyk YO! 02:03, 6 January 2009 (UTC)Reply

I have had a go at tackling your concerns, particularly regarding a rewrite of the lead. Although this does not contain as much as a paragraph each on the selection of the mountain and the manner of the experiment, they are both provided with a few sentences that should clarify how the whole thing worked. The single-sentence paragraphs have been incorporated into those next to them, with the exception of the mathematical analysis section, for which I feel to do so would make comprehension difficult. The quote issues has been addressed and the whitespace adjacent to the density table now removed. This last seems to have been a browser-related problem, for it wrapped correctly in Firefox, Chrome and Safari. Yea, Internet Explorer sucketh mightily. — BillC talk 19:56, 6 January 2009 (UTC)Reply
Hearken unto the words of Bill, for he speaketh wisely. IE is rubbish, but using it is not a crime punishable by wonky formatting and misaligned text. I'm more than happy with the changes you've made since I reviewed it, and I'm passing it as a good article. Well done. Reyk YO! 21:22, 6 January 2009 (UTC)Reply