Talk:Sarita Colonia/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Grnrchst (talk · contribs) 11:23, 23 June 2023 (UTC)

Lead and infobox

• "Sarita" is the diminuitive form of "Sara". Is there anyway to clarify this for non-hispanohablantes? (Just so readers don't think "Sarita" is an entirely different name)

  I'd say follow the example of similar pages, but I don't remember ever seeing such a clarification on a Wikipedia page. My hope was that having both her birth name and the diminutive name was sufficient. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 14:56, 23 June 2023 (UTC)

Biography

• Maybe swap the order of her parents, so it aligns with her name.
• Was she taken to a hospital in Lima? Also why is it necessary to specify both 19 and 20 December, when they're only one day apart? Think the two sentences about her illness and death could be combined.

  The sources didn't describe the hospital explicitly, which is why the sourcing in the sentence is split up like that. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 14:56, 23 June 2023 (UTC)

• Spotcheck: "Sarita was taken to the Bellavista hospital and died there the next day, on December 20, 1940, at the age of 26."

Grave site and shrine

• "further miracles" such as?

  Removed "further" so it doesn't imply more information is coming (as the sources don't have it). Thebiguglyalien (talk) 14:56, 23 June 2023 (UTC)

• "when the common grave was excavated" Think "exhumed" would be the more correct word here, no?

Followers

• "criminals" Is this elaborated on? What kind of criminals?

  There's some information about her association with thieves, which appears later in the article, but that's about all that's specified in the sources I found. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 14:56, 23 June 2023 (UTC)

• Spotcheck: "She is particularly revered by prostitutes, petty criminals and transvestites, who invoke her protection before travelling out into the street." That they invoke her protection seems like an important detail to include.

The invocation of protection is mentioned regarding thieves and prisoners in the next paragraph (and even served as a DYK hook a few days ago). Thebiguglyalien (talk) 14:56, 23 June 2023 (UTC)

Folk tales

• "Colonia's brother wrote a biography with the stated purpose of correcting falsehoods that had been spread about her life." Any more detail on this?

• Spotcheck: "Se refiere a que supuestamente Sarita murió ante un intento de violación, cuando prefirió lanzarse al mar y morir, antes de ser vejada; que no ha existido realmente; que los restos mortales no están en el mausoleo." So one of the falsehoods is the myth about her death, another is that she never existed and another is that her remains aren't in the mausoleum. I think you covered the important parts here, though.

Image and media

• "As with many popular cultural figures, depictions are more likely to portray her as a white woman." Is this portrayal incorrect? It's hard to tell from the photo.

  I don't remember any sources going into detail about her race or ethnicity, but I believe they indicated or implied that she was not white. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 14:56, 23 June 2023 (UTC)

Checklist

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

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Very well-written and put together article, which I found quite interesting to read. I have notes, but nothing major or even particularly necessary to address.

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

   b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a. (reference section):

   b. (citations to reliable sources):

   All sources are either books from academic presses or are articles in scholarly journals.

   c. (OR):

   d. (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a. (major aspects):

   b. (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

   Only reversion was of a resolved orphan tag.

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

   Image in the infobox is in the public domain, but the license of the stamp is missing. If no license can be provided for that on Wikicommons, the image should be removed from this article, or else I can't pass this. The file is set to be deleted tomorrow, so I'll hold this review until then. Stamp has been removed from the article and will likely be removed from Wikicommons tomorrow.

   b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   Alt text should be provided.

7. Overall:

   Pass/fail:

   Unfortunately the only thing holding this review back from an immediate pass is the issue of the stamp's license. I'll be more than happy to pass this once the licensing issue has been dealt with. Now it has been removed I'm happy to pass it. --Grnrchst (talk) 11:23, 23 June 2023 (UTC)

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

Grnrchst I've removed the image. I tried to address the above comments when possible, but there's only so much to get out of these sources. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 14:56, 23 June 2023 (UTC)

Thanks for attending to this! Passing now. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:05, 23 June 2023 (UTC)