Talk:Sarah Fisher/GA1

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Sanfranciscogiants17 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk · contribs) 00:23, 16 May 2020 (UTC)Reply


1. Prose Lead

Early life

1999-2003

2004-2007

More to come! Great start! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 01:17, 16 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

2008-2010

  • funding from fans, and had - take out the comma, not needed
  • She qualified in 22nd place; in the race, Fisher was collected by Tony Kanaan after he spun exiting turn three on the 106th lap, finishing 30th. - She qualified in 22nd place. In the race, Fisher was collected by Tony Kanaan after he spun exiting turn three on the 106th lap. She finished 30th. - the way it is worded now, you can't tell whether Fisher or Kanaan finished 30th.
  • about not competing in any more - about not being able to compete in any more
  • Split the sentence about Kentucky and Chicagoland. End the first part with "battled with Danica Patrick in turn one." Then, start the next sentence, "At Chicagoland, she bruised..."
  • Fisher did not contest the entire season due to - She did not race a full schedule due to - The way you have it now makes it look like she did not race at all
  • Fisher's participation meant she surpassed the record - With the start, Fisher surpassed the record
  • The media voted her to receive the Scott Brayton Award as the driver who - She received the Scott Brayton Award, voted on by the media and presented to the driver who - better grammatically
  • The rest of the season was sub-par for Fisher; her year's highest result was a 12th-place finish at Kentucky - Fisher's highest result for the rest of the season was a 12th place finish at Kentucky. - The source doesn't explicitly say sub-par; that's a conclusion that should be left up to the reader. Fortunately, the sentence about her finishing 25th should cover it.
  • reported she would - replace "she" with "Fisher," since this is her first mention in the paragraph.
  • Take out the comma after Barber Motorsports Park
  • her season's first round - her season's first race
  • Fisher had her season's best finish was a 15th place at Texas and Chiagoland - Fisher's best finish of the season was 15th, which she attained at Texas as well as at Chicagoland.
  • with a 22nd at - with a 22nd-place finish at
  • In October 2010, she said she had sacrificed the running of her team because of her status as driver/owner. Fisher subsequently sought a full-time competitor but did not rule out a part-time schedule for herself - In October 2010, she announced she was looking for a full-time driver to replace her because she thought her driving was taking away from her ability to adequately run the team. She left open the possibility that she would still run a part-time schedule the next season.
  • raced the No. 67 car - replaced her in the No. 67 car
  • This isn't in order with my other comments, but Dale Pelfrey, Belterra Resort Indy 300, 2005 NASCAR West Series, and Whiteland Park Raceway all still need to be unlinked since there is no article on those.

Post-racing career

Public image and personal life

2. Verifiability

  • Ref 9 is dead.
  • Ref 15 is dead.
    • Deleted both of the dead links to leave a bare offline reference
    • Update: Reference 15 has a working link to the entry on Newspapers.com
  • Should there be a page number for ref 58?
    • Added link along with page number
  • Unlink The Index Journal for ref 122, since there is no article for it.


3. Depth of Coverage

4. Neutral

5. Stable

6. Illustrations

7. Misc

I'll take another look once you address these, but the article should be good to go once these are addressed! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 14:07, 16 May 2020 (UTC)Reply