Talk:Saks Fifth Avenue flagship store/GA1

GA Review

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Original reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 18:09, 31 May 2021 (UTC) Reviewer: Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 04:12, 23 July 2021 (UTC)

Review

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Copy changes

Exterior

• by chamfered corners. — change period to a comma
• a chamfered bays — stray "a"

Interior

• separately-operated — no hyphen needed on an adverb ending in "ly"
• 65,000 square feet — use a convert on this, I see it's one of the few without

History

• German Jewish family, — rm excess comma
• at 34th Street, — comma not needed here
• which Saks wanted for display windows, but which was — rm comma
• started in 1987 — a comma *is* needed here
• It would move around departments, and transform — rm comma.

Note on commas. The rule is fairly simple. If I remove "and" and it splits properly into two sentences, you need a comma. "Transform back-room space into retail space" is not a standalone sentence, for instance, but "the tower was completed in 1990" is.

Other

• Sources need archiving with IABot. I ran a date script for reference date consistency. An aside: Newsday is now on newspapers.com, so consider clippings from there (not required since it's a new holding, but wanted to make you aware).
• Earwig tool mostly catches building names and quotes used in the article.
• Co-nominators are the only substantial contributors in recent article history.
• Images are all appropriate for use (PD or CC) and have captions in the image. The architectural plans are acceptable as the building was substantially complete by December 1, 1990.

Overall

@Epicgenius and Ɱ: Putting on hold for copy revisions and archiving sources. Looks great overall, and with fresh eyes the changes should be easy. Ping me when the changes are complete. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 06:35, 23 July 2021 (UTC)

Sammi Brie, thanks for the review. I have done most of these, including clipping Newsday, but I was not able to archive dead references because the bot timed out on me. Epicgenius (talk) 13:41, 23 July 2021 (UTC)

Epicgenius, I ran IABot just now, and it worked. I see the copy changes have been made too. Will be passing. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 14:29, 23 July 2021 (UTC)

Non-review comments

I'm Carbrera and I will be handling this good article nomination. I know quite a bit about the history of Saks, so I am looking forward to completing this review, which I will also be submitting as part of the 2021 WikiCup. I will post any comments and suggestions as soon as possible. Thanks! Carbrera (talk) 18:09, 31 May 2021 (UTC).

Looking forward to it! ɱ (talk) 23:53, 7 June 2021 (UTC)

Carbrera, I don't want to rush you, but have you had a chance to look over the article during the past month? Epicgenius (talk) 18:33, 5 July 2021 (UTC)

It appears that Carbrera is no longer participating in the Wikicup, and hasn't edited Wikipedia in over two weeks. If another seven days pass without any action on the review, I'd suggest listing it as an abandoned review with the ongoing GAN backlog drive, so it's more likely to get prompt attention. BlueMoonset (talk) 01:31, 7 July 2021 (UTC)

I must deeply apologize for my absence without alerting any of you. My father has been recently hospitalized and is very ill, and I am unsure what the future holds. I hope to one day review another article to make it up to you two, but I do not know when that will be quite yet. I am very sorry for taking up your time. Carbrera (talk) 15:41, 15 July 2021 (UTC).

Carbrera, I am extremely sorry to hear about your father, and I really hope he has a good recovery. Don't worry about it, you don't owe us anything. I'll ping BlueMoonset to see what should happen next with this nomination. Epicgenius (talk) 00:43, 22 July 2021 (UTC)

Epicgenius, Carbrera, this can be taken over by a new reviewer, and probably will be. There's currently a GAN backlog drive going on, and this nomination has been listed on the drive page as one of three available for review for drive credit—the other two had also had a reviewer who had to withdraw. As part of the process, the nomination status has been changed to "second opinion", which also attracts potential reviewers. With luck, it will be picked up soon. BlueMoonset (talk) 01:32, 22 July 2021 (UTC)

@BlueMoonset and Epicgenius: I'll pick this one up. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 04:12, 23 July 2021 (UTC)

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