Talk:SS Ironsides/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:18, 2 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• "Cleveland, and Lake Superior " no comma needed.
• "9:30, 9:40 or 9:45 p.m" probably no need for this in the lead.
• "Later during the day" perhaps "later that evening"?
• "At 9:00 or 9:30 a.m., the " again, too detailed for lead.
• "The wreck of Ironsides was discovered" no need for "of Ironsides"
• "built on in 1864" -on.
• "conflict on who built her.[1][2][3] Ironsides was built" bit repetitive and these short sentences can be merged.
• The Lac La Belle article says she (an identical ship) was built by Ira Lafrinnier...
• "changed to Milwaukee, Wisconsin.[11]" overlinked,
• "Englemann of Milwaukee, Wisconsin, and" ditto.
• "in a storm off Racine, Wisconsin.[5]" overlinked.
• "199,556" probably nearest $1000 is fine.
• "with 13,000 bushels of wheat," overlinked.
• Lead "partially collapsed in 120 feet (36.6 m) of water" article "109 feet (33.2 m) of water, while the bow lies slightly deeper at 122 feet (37.2 m)"
• "Johnston, J.E. " ref, J. E. and en-dash not spaced hyphen.
• I don't see this article linked to all those incident/shipwreck templates so they shouldn't be there. That applies to all these articles, but I've only just noticed.

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 09:16, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: I don't know what to do about the rounding of dollars. Other than that, everything is done. GreatLakesShips (talk) 20:59, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

Ok, I've fixed that for you, using the template's documentation, if you add |r=-3 then it will give the inflated value to the nearest 1000 (r=-2 to the nearest 100, r=-1, nearest 10 etc). The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 07:27, 4 September 2021 (UTC)