Talk:SNCASO Trident/GA1

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Sturmvogel 66 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 04:15, 13 January 2021 (UTC)Reply


  • " and the Air Force ordered nine SO.9050 Trident II fighters in 1954 to further develop the aircraft so it could serve as a short-range interceptor" - I'm confused by this sentence. I see three ordered in 1954 in the body, and then 6 ordered in 1956.
  • "Only six of these were ultimately completed, of which the first three were damaged or destroyed in accidents before the programme was cancelled in 1958" - I see the first three destroyed (the three from 1956). However, references to the 1st, 4th, and 6th of the pre-production aircraft (the 1956 ones) make it seem like all of those six were made. Or were the 2nd, 3rd, and 5th not completed? What happened is mentioned all the way down in the variants section, but it's rather confusing to the reader until they get there, so can a brief statement that only 3 of the 1956 ones were completed be added to the main body section?
    • I think I was a bit careless about how I used prototype and pre-production, see how it reads now.
  • "Furaline and nitric acid accidentally mixed and exploded, killing test pilot Charles Goujon" - You've already introduced Goujon, so you don't need to gloss him here
  • Consider inserting the date of first flight into the lead
  • Source link for the in-flight image is dead.

That's it from me I think. Hog Farm Bacon 03:20, 14 January 2021 (UTC)Reply