Talk:SAS President Steyn/GA1

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Krishna Chaitanya Velaga in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 01:23, 20 November 2016 (UTC)Reply


Well constructed, will come back shortly. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 01:23, 20 November 2016 (UTC)Reply

  • Section 1; para 1; Consistency error between prose and infobox.
Parameter Prose Infobox
length 370 feet (112.8 m) 370 ft 0 in (112.78 m)
beam 41 feet (12.5 m) 41 ft 0 in (12.5 m)
Draught 17 feet 6 inches (5.3 m) 17 ft 6 in (5.33 m)
  • Fixed
  • Consider the adding the "power" parameter to the infobox.
    • Already there, see installed power.
  • Section 2; para 1; President Steyn was the middle ship of the three sister ships; the sentence is a bit awkward. Consider rewording it as "President Steyn was the second of the three sister ships" or "President Steyn was the second ship of the class".
  • Section 2; para 1; A comma (,) after "8 April 1963"
  • Section 2; para 1; with Captain John Fairbairn was in command; I think just "with Captain John Fairbairn in command" is enough.
    • Indeed.
  • Section 2; para 1; It is mentioned that she was completed on 8 April 1963, but when was the ship commissioned, it is never mentioned.
    • Good catch
  • Section 2; para 2; Please mention what is "Capex 63". An exercise?
    • Moved up from Capex 64
  • Section 2; para 2; I suggest a non-breakable space between "Capex" "64" in "Capex 64", for me, on my screen, Capex and 64 appear on two different lines which is a bit awkward.
    • OK
  • Section 2; para 2; A comma (,) after "In 1965".
    • No, it's not really a prefatory clause.
  • Section 2; para 2; The abbreviations RN and SAN are never defined previously.
    • Good catch.
  • Section 2; para 3; made another voyage to Toulon the following year; Did both President Steyn and Emily Hobhouse go, or just Steyn, mention clearly.
    • Good idea.
  • Section 2; para 3; Better to mention Johanna van der Merwe's place of build. I mean French-built, Spanish-built etc.
    • Clarified a little more indirectly.
  • Section 2; para 3; A comma (,) after "In 1973".
  • Section 2; para 4; link "Operation Savannah"
    • Oops.

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):   d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
    Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 12:08, 28 November 2016 (UTC)Reply