Talk:Ryu Sung-hyun

Latest comment: 2 days ago by Yue in topic Did you know nomination

Did you know nomination edit

  • ... that Olympian Ryu Sung-hyun (pictured) taught himself gymnastics for four years because his father did not want him to become an athlete?
5x expanded by Riley1012 (talk). Number of QPQs required: 1. Nominator has 29 past nominations.

Riley1012 (talk) 13:02, 18 May 2024 (UTC).Reply

  • Comment I'm an IP user so I think I can't approve the overall DYK, but just a heads up that I'm a Korean speaker and I verified that both hook 1 and ALT1 are supported by the sources given. I'll give a slight comment that I'd prefer ALT1 be worded as "... that Ryu Sung-hyun (pictured) will become the first Korea National Sport University student athlete to compete at two Olympic Games?" Think the meaning of this is slightly clearer and it's slightly more concise. I prefer the main hook to ALT1 though; think it's more interesting. 104.232.119.107 (talk) 07:35, 19 May 2024 (UTC)Reply
    Thanks for your input. I have changed the wording on ALT1. I was trying to figure out how to emphasize that he is competing in two Olympics while enrolled in the school- there are multiple alumni who have competed in multiple Olympics. -Riley1012 (talk) 12:50, 19 May 2024 (UTC)Reply
    Comment: hooks that treat the future as definite are problematic. I'm assuming Ryu Sung-hyun has qualified for the Olympics, but even athletes on their country's Olympic teams sometimes don't end up competing due to injury, illness, accident, or some other complication, so "will" is a problem (see WP:CRYSTAL). Perhaps "is set to become" could be used (though, like the IP user, I prefer the original hook):
    Note that if you want the Olympics in the original hook, you can do so simply by adding "Olympian" before his name. —BlueMoonset (talk) 04:33, 22 May 2024 (UTC)Reply
    Okay, that is totally fair. I've incorporated both of your suggestions. -Riley1012 (talk) 10:44, 22 May 2024 (UTC)Reply
General: Article is new enough and long enough
Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
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QPQ: Done.

Overall:   The article is well-written, well-sourced, and well-organised. Both English-language and Korean-language sources were checked for close paraphrasing; no issues arose. Both hooks are interesting and verified, but I strongly favour the initial hook over ALT1. Yue🌙 03:15, 24 May 2024 (UTC)Reply