Talk:Rockefeller Apartments/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 23:30, 1 July 2021 (UTC)

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 23:30, 1 July 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• Short description goes to the top of the article.
• "and to Henry Goelet" → "and Henry Goelet"
• "than the cylindrical bows" - is "the" necessary?
  • I used "the" only because these specific bows are already mentioned, as opposed to being introduced in the sentence (in which case it would say "There are no major decorative elements other than cylindrical bows. [Description of the bows...]"). I've changed it to "these" bows. Epicgenius (talk) 00:29, 8 July 2021 (UTC)

Makes sense. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 00:40, 8 July 2021 (UTC)

• "one at the extreme end" - is "extreme" necessary?
• "northern tower" - can this be simply "north tower"?
• "Similarly to on 54th Street" - reword.
• "acquainted in the development" → "acquainted with the development"
  • The current wording is because they had come to know each other while Rockefeller Center was being developed, rather than being acquainted with the specifics of construction. I changed to "acquainted during the development". Epicgenius (talk) 00:29, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
• "saw as a better use" → "saw as better use"
• "with the purpose of operating" → "to operate" (less wordy)
• "took title on behalf" → "took the title on behalf"
• "onetime fee" → "one-time fee" (both times)
• "In relation to" - kinda wordy so reword.
• Wikilink Christopher Gray and Paul Goldberger.
• USA TODAY → USA Today
• Wall Street Journal → The Wall Street Journal
• Remove "– The Hollywood Reporter" from #70 (repetitive).
• That citation is also missing an author.
• Mark sources from The Wall Street Journal with "|url-access=subscription".
• Sort categories in alphabetical order.
• Add alt text to every image being used.

Progress

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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@Some Dude From North Carolina: Thanks. I have fixed all of these accordingly, except for the few points I replied to, which I addressed differently. Epicgenius (talk) 00:29, 8 July 2021 (UTC)

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