Talk:Robert L. McLeod/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: PCN02WPS (talk · contribs) 23:55, 6 March 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: HistoryTheorist (talk · contribs) 18:19, 23 July 2024 (UTC)

I am going to review this article for the GAN review drive and hope to add comments shortly. As I am not a super experienced reviewer, I will ask for a second opinion, as is the rules for the backlog drive. ❤HistoryTheorist❤ 18:19, 23 July 2024 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

• In both the lede section and the career section you mention that After the war's end McLeod resigned. While you, I, and probably a lot of educated Western readers know what war you are mentioning, I think it might be helpful to mention the specific war at least once in the article.
• Following his time in Louisville he studied at the University of Edinburgh from 1923 to 1924 and, after his return to the United States, he spent time at Princeton Theological Seminary and Union Theological Seminary. Longer sentence would read better if broken up.
• Winter Haven, Florida is linked three times in the article. Perhaps linking it in the personal life section is unnecessary?
  • @HistoryTheorist: all three done. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 15:30, 24 July 2024 (UTC)
    • Thanks. I'm still not done examining the article; just the type of reviewer who likes to add comments as they go. I don't think it will need much more fixes but I haven't looked through the entire article throughly. I will ping you when I am done. ❤HistoryTheorist❤ 17:13, 24 July 2024 (UTC)
• In that job, he worked closely with Charles J. Turck, who had left office as president of Centre College in 1936 and was working for the PCUSA's Board of Christian Education in Philadelphia at the time I know that you worked on the Turck article, but nothing in your citations points to him leaving in 1936. Perhaps find a citation in the Turck article and move it here?
  • Done. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 12:41, 26 July 2024 (UTC)
• If it is possible, perhaps give page numbers on the interview citations? While I was checking one of the sentences, I nearly got lost and thought there was OR when there really wasn't and page numbers would have been beneficial.
  • Added page numbers. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 12:41, 26 July 2024 (UTC)
• Clarifying question: when McLeod recounts his experience, he calls his ship the USS Antetha. How were you able to ascertain that he actually meant the USS Antietam?
  • Added cite. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 12:41, 26 July 2024 (UTC)
• While you wrote that McLeod retired for good in 1981, I don't the interview giving a specific year for his "real" retirement. Perhaps you could point me to where you got that date?
  • I got that since he said he'd been retired for two years in the 1983 interview. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 12:41, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

  Makes sense; all good now :) ❤HistoryTheorist❤ 16:45, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

@PCN02WPS: Unless I find some other minor grammar/wording error, I think the article is good to go once you dress my final comments and is most likely going to pass. Because of the backlog drive rules, I'll find somebody else to double-check my work. ❤HistoryTheorist❤ 00:01, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

For anybody who is performing an assist -- I spot checked all citations except those I didn't have access to, mainly the books cited and the ancestry citation (reliable because it is an official gov record). ❤HistoryTheorist❤ 00:05, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

@HistoryTheorist: Happy to help. simongraham (talk) 06:35, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

@HistoryTheorist and Simongraham: everything taken care of or responded to! PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 12:41, 26 July 2024 (UTC)